Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The number of players participate in several hobbies at sigle social hub in Melbourne, Austrailia over the period of twenty years are illustratred in this line graph. The data is measured in thousands.
Overall, it is clear that the fiilm club was the most popolar activity.Table tennis shows dramatically increase while Amateur dramatics was the only activity which shows downward trend.
In year 2000, Film club has the highest number of participants, at around 65. In year 2005 and 2010 shows a minor decreased of almost 2 percent and 3 percent and in 2020 fairly remain same to year 2000. Table tennis has the second highest number of participants. Firstly, it shows a fluctuation trend but in year 2010 it has almost 20 percent and it rose dramatically to almost 52 in 2020.Martial arts fluctuate between 30 to 40 in whole period.
Musical performance start from zero in 2005 and raise almost 30 at 2020.Amateur dramatics is the only one which shows downward trend. In year 2000, it has almost 27 increase slightly in 2005 and then suddenly drop to about 7 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main overall patterns: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines. Several figures are also broadly accurate, including the film club’s starting level and table tennis reaching about 52–54 by 2020. However, some reporting is incomplete or inaccurate: musical performances reach only about 18 in 2020, not “almost 30,” and they begin in 2010 rather than starting from zero in 2005 (the figure is zero in both 2000 and 2005). The description of table tennis as fluctuating before 2010 is also unclear, since it rises from 16 to 20 and then stays level. More precise coverage of the series and key changes would make the summary more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, and it groups several activities together. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is uneven: the film club, table tennis and martial arts are discussed together, while musical performances and amateur dramatics are added afterward without a clear comparison. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “In year” and “and then.” Punctuation also runs ideas together, as in “activity.Table tennis,” and the final paragraph shifts between series abruptly. Organise the details into clearer comparisons and use linking phrases to show contrast and change.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuate,” “downward trend” and “rose dramatically,” so the reader can generally understand the trends you intend to describe. However, the range and control are limited by repeated or imprecise wording. “Percent” is not appropriate for the participant counts, and “Musical performance start from zero in 2005” does not accurately express when that series begins to rise. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “Austrailia,” “popolar,” “fiilm” and “illustratred.” Choose precise terms for numbers and trends, and check spelling and collocations carefully to make the description clearer and more natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The number of players … are illustrated” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “In year 2005 and 2010 shows” lacks a clear grammatical subject. Verb forms are also inconsistent: “Film club has” and “it rose” shift between present and past, and “Musical performance start” does not agree with its subject. Articles and sentence boundaries are often missing or awkward, as in “In year 2000” and “activity.Table tennis.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete sentence structures before adding more complex clauses.
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