Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The graph shows information about different activities participations for 4 years in Melbourne, Australia. Overall, participants of film club and martial arts remained steadily ,whereas amateur dramatics participants decreased sharply.

In 2000, film club members started around 65 people and slightly fluctuated; but ended up with similar members within 4 years. So was martial arts members which had approximately 38 people for both the beginning and the end of the period.

Furthermore, table tennis members started relatively small compared to the film club, their trend shows that between 2000 and 2010, the slope only changed slightly but after 2010, members significantly increased over the years. In 2005, musical performances had zero members; however, it gradually increased over time and reached up to 18 members in 2020.

Between 2000 and 2005, members of amateur dramatics increased slightly but for the next 15 years, amount of members dropped and eventually reached

just below 10.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify several important patterns: film-club participation stayed high, table tennis rose markedly after 2010, musical performances grew from zero, and amateur dramatics declined to below 10. The final figure for amateur dramatics and the broad trends are accurate. However, the overview says film club and martial arts remained “steadily,” which is imprecise, and the response does not clearly highlight table tennis as the strongest growth or compare its rise with the decline in amateur dramatics. Some details are also inaccurate: the chart covers five years (2000–2020), not four, and musical performances were at zero in 2000 and 2005, not just 2005. More precise comparisons and a sharper overview would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs describing the main activity trends. Sequencing expressions such as “Furthermore,” “however,” and “Between 2000 and 2005” help the reader follow the timeline. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. “So was martial arts members” does not clearly connect the comparison to the previous sentence, while “their trend” has an uncertain reference. The overview also groups film club and martial arts together without explaining their different levels and fluctuations. Organise the body more deliberately around contrasting trends, and use clearer references and transitions so that comparisons flow naturally rather than appearing as separate observations.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of trend vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “increased,” “dropped,” and “reached,” and these choices generally communicate the chart’s movements. There are also attempts at more precise description, such as “relatively small” and “significantly increased.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however: “different activities participations,” “members,” and “the slope only changed slightly” do not describe the data naturally. “Remained steadily” is also incomplete as a phrase. Use “participants” or “participation” consistently, and choose verbs such as “rose,” “fell,” or “remained stable” to describe the figures directly. This would improve precision while retaining the adequate range already shown.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses joined with “whereas,” “but,” and “however,” and the main meaning is usually clear. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “participants … remained steadily” lacks a suitable adjective or verb phrase, and “So was martial arts members” has faulty sentence structure. In “their trend shows,” the tense shifts from past reporting to the present, while “amount of members” also has an article and number-pattern problem. Punctuation is occasionally awkward, as in “steadily ,whereas.” Review sentence structure, agreement, articles, and consistent past-tense reporting. More accurate control of these forms would make the varied sentence patterns easier to read.

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