Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph shows the changes in numbers of individuals in various activities at one social centre in a city of Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.

Looking into the details, the most frequent activity of participants can be seen in only film club over these years with over 60 participants. Following that, the number of individuals in table tennis activity starts from less than 20 during year 2000 and then surges to over 50 in the year 2020. After that, in the martial arts section, the line is somewhat straight and there can be seen some small fluctuations but it remains stale over these years. Musical performances are also increased from 2005 to 2020 with approximately reaching the 20 number mark in 2020. However, the number of activity of people in amateur dramatics has decline over the years with over 20 numbers in the year 2000 to a big fall after 2010 and it drops even below 10 number mark in 2020.

Overall it is clear that the people are most frequently active in the film club centre during these years and Amateur dramatics is the most less one.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response identifies the main patterns: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines to a low level. It also includes relevant comparisons and approximate figures, such as table tennis moving from below 20 to above 50 and amateur dramatics falling below 10. This gives the reader a sound overall picture. However, some features are only partly reported: musical performances began at zero in 2000, not 2005, and the account does not clearly describe their rise from 2010 onward. The overview also repeats the ranking rather than summarising the contrasting trends. To strengthen the response, report the starting point accurately and make the overview capture the major increases and decreases across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a generally understandable sequence, moving from the leading activity to other series and ending with an overall statement. Linking expressions such as “Following that,” “After that,” and “However” help signal relationships, and the reader can follow the broad comparisons. At times, though, these transitions feel mechanical, and the paragraphing does not clearly separate the overview from the detailed account. The final “Overall” statement comes after the details and largely repeats the opening observation. A clearer structure would introduce a concise overview immediately after the introduction, then group the rising activities together and the declining or relatively stable ones together. This would make progression more deliberate and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “fluctuations,” “surges,” and “decline,” and the main trends are usually clear. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a graph: “the most frequent activity of participants,” “the line is somewhat straight,” “remains stale,” and “the most less one.” Repetition of “number of individuals” and “activity” also limits precision. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they make parts of the report awkward. Aim for standard data-reporting collocations such as “had the highest participation,” “remained relatively stable,” and “recorded the lowest figure,” while varying references to participants and numbers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence forms, including longer sentences with contrast and time clauses, and the overall meaning remains understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “Musical performances are also increased” uses an incorrect verb form, while “amateur dramatics has decline” needs a past participle. The phrase “the number of activity of people” also has an unclear grammatical structure, and “the most less one” is not correctly formed. Some sentences combine several ideas without clear control. Review past-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement, and comparative structures, and use shorter, well-controlled sentences where needed. More consistent accuracy would make the range of structures more effective.

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