Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph below illustrates data about the number of participants on differnet activities at social centre in Melbourne , Australia between 2000 and 2020 .

Overall , we can see the change in number of participants on 5 different activities between the years 2000 and 2020 , while film club remains the top activity in term of participants between those years , there are other activity who had such a dramatic change .

The first thing we notice is that Film club and Martial arts number of participants remain the same around 65 and 38 participant ,respectively

the Film club claim the top spot for most activity with participants trhough the 2000 to 2020 ,while the Martial art goes from being the second to being the third while coonserving the same number of participants.

Table tennis had such an incredible increase in number of participants going from around 20 participant to more than double that by 2020 , it reached more than 50 participant , Amateur dramatic had quiet a significant decrease going from 25 to 8 part

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall pattern that the film club remained the most popular activity and select relevant changes in table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, several details are inaccurate or unclear: film club participation fluctuated slightly rather than remaining the same, and martial arts varied between about 32 and 38 rather than staying at 38. The claim that martial arts fell from second to third is also not consistently supported, since it was still above table tennis in 2020. Musical performances, which rose from zero to around 18, are omitted, and the final comparison about amateur dramatics is cut off. These limitations leave important features only partly reported. Give a clearer overview and accurately describe the main trends across all five activities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing selected activities. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “The first thing we notice,” and “while” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression is weakened by long, loosely connected sentences and unclear references. For example, the sentence beginning “while film club remains the top activity” joins several ideas without clear punctuation, and “the Martial art goes from being the second to being the third” does not explain the comparison clearly. The final paragraph ends abruptly, leaving the discussion incomplete. Organise the details into clearer comparisons, use full stops to separate ideas, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “increase,” “decrease,” “participants,” and “dramatic change,” so the reader can generally understand the intended trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive. Phrases such as “claim the top spot for most activity with participants” and “conserving the same number” are not natural ways to describe the graph. There are also spelling errors, including “differnet,” “trhough,” and “coonserving,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully. For example, use “remained the most popular activity,” “fluctuated,” and “rose sharply” to express the comparisons more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic present-tense forms to describe the graph, but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation are especially noticeable: the overview joins clauses with commas, and the sentence about film club and martial arts lacks a clear ending. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “at social centre,” “5 different activities,” and “other activity who had.” The phrase “Film club and Martial arts number of participants remain” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while” or “whereas,” and check articles, verb agreement, and punctuation.

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