Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided graph illustrates the number of participants for five activities at one centre in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is evident that the film club is the highest over the period, and the amateur dramatics club is the lowest activity in recent years.
Starting from first data set, there are film club highest then martial arts club are fluctuated over the years and the amateur drematics club significantly change and most lowest popular club in 2020.
Another side: table tennis club starting from approxmately 15 participants and it significantly increased from 2010 to 2020. and the last club musical perfoemance was less popular in 2005 but it gradually grow up over the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the main contrast that the film club remained the most popular and amateur dramatics became the least popular, and you mention the growth in table tennis and musical performances. However, the report is only partial: it gives few figures and does not clearly describe the key changes across the period. For example, table tennis rose from about 16 to 54 participants, while amateur dramatics fell from 26 to 6; these substantial trends deserve clearer reporting. The statement that musical performances were “less popular in 2005” is imprecise, as participation was zero in both 2000 and 2005. The response also falls 33 words short of the required minimum, limiting the detail available. Add a fuller overview and accurate comparisons supported by selected figures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs that attempt to group the activities. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is not consistently clear, particularly in “Starting from first data set” and “Another side,” which do not establish precise relationships between the information. The final paragraph combines table tennis and musical performances without explaining their contrasting starting points or trends, and the repeated use of “club” makes the account feel list-like. Use clear topic sentences to group the most important trends—for example, the consistently high film-club figures and the contrasting rise in table tennis and fall in amateur dramatics—and connect comparisons explicitly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased,” “fluctuated,” and “over the period,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts awkward or unclear. “The highest over the period” would be more precise as “had the highest participation throughout,” while “significantly change” does not clearly describe the direction of change. There are also misspellings such as “drematics,” “approxmately,” and “perfoemance.” Aim to use accurate trend language, including “rose steadily,” “declined sharply,” and “remained relatively stable,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish increases, decreases, and fluctuations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt a few different sentence forms, including an overview beginning “Overall” and a sentence with “and” to connect trends. However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence structure and verb forms sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “Starting from first data set” lacks an article and a clear grammatical subject, while “there are film club highest” has incorrect word order and an incomplete comparison. In “the amateur dramatics club significantly change,” the verb form does not agree with the past-time description. The sentence beginning “Another side” also contains a fragment-like transition and an awkwardly joined sentence. Practise complete, controlled sentences such as “Table tennis rose from 16 participants in 2000 to 54 in 2020.”
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