Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line gaph illustrates the information on the numbers of participants for different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from a period of 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the proportion of film club participants acticity is higher throughout the years while the amateur dramatics participants acticity has a lower proportion.
By analyzing the graph clearly, in 2000 there were no participants of musical performances until in 2005 there is an significant increase in the participants activity which is then increased furthermore to 10,15,19 in 2010,2015 and 2020 respectively.Table tennis has 15 participants in 2000 and it was going until in 2010 it gains a sharp increase in the number of participants by activity which is 55 in 2020 and is the second most largest number after firm club.
The number of amateur dramatics were 27 in 2000 until in 2005 it loses its number of particapants to 20 in 2010 and as decreasing significantly to 15 and then to 5 in 2015 and 2020. Also the martial arts has a balanced pattern of numbers of participants throughout the years.
in last the firm club has a greatest number of participants which is 65 in number and are the same
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main contrast between the consistently high film-club figures and the decline in amateur dramatics, and you mention the strong rise in table tennis. However, the account is only partly accurate and some key trends are unclear. Musical performances did not rise significantly by 2005: participation remained at zero until 2010, then increased to about 12, 16 and 18. Table tennis rose steadily to 20 by 2010 before climbing sharply, rather than showing a sharp increase by 2010. The final sentence about the film club is unfinished and does not report its stable pattern around the mid-60s. Include a complete overview and select the most important changes accurately to make the summary more fully informative.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has separate paragraphs for an introduction, overview and details, so there is a basic attempt to organise the information. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is difficult to follow: the musical-performances and table-tennis descriptions run together, and the final paragraph ends with the incomplete phrase “and are the same.” Linking expressions such as “until,” “also” and “in last” are repetitive or do not clearly show the relationship between events. Grouping the series by their main trends—for example, rising activities together and declining or fluctuating ones together—would create a clearer sequence. Use complete sentences and more precise references so readers can follow which activity and year each figure describes.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “sharp increase,” “decreasing significantly” and “balanced pattern,” which helps convey broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For example, “the proportion of film club participants activity” is not a natural way to describe the number of participants, and “loses its number of participants” is awkward. There are also spelling errors such as “gaph,” “acticity,” “particapants” and “firm.” Use precise terms such as “number,” “rose,” “fell” and “fluctuated,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt longer sentences and use time clauses, as in “until in 2005,” but these structures are often faulty, and many sentences contain errors that make the timeline or comparison harder to understand. Examples include “there is an significant increase,” “it gains a sharp increase,” and “the martial arts has a balanced pattern.” There are problems with articles, verb forms, agreement and sentence boundaries; the final sentence is also incomplete. Most statements follow a similar simple pattern, so the range of controlled structures is limited. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense forms to describe the data, such as “participation rose from … to ….”
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