Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given graphs give data on the number of participants for multiple actions at one social organization in Melbourne, Australia, for the time duration 2000 to 2020.

Multiple Participants, by activity 2000 to 2020.

In the given chart mention different activitys from 2000 to 2020. There is activity one on top of another is down. In 2020 the Film Club is 65, and after some years it decreases to 60 in 2010, after that is slowly increases in 2020 ti increses upto 68.

Amateur dramatics is in start on 25, ant it will increseses to 30, but after that it will decrease and it is down in 2020 to 5.

Table tennis and Martial arts are also crossed with each other in 2015 on point 35. The Musical performances is started in 2005 and it will inresees fastly year by year 2015 it cros the Amateur dramatics on 15 and in 2020 it went up to 20.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant trends, especially the decline in amateur dramatics and the rise in table tennis, and you include some approximate figures. However, the response gives only a partial account of the graph and lacks a clear overview of its main features. Film club remains the largest activity throughout, but this is not stated clearly; martial arts is mentioned only in the comparison about 2015, and its fluctuations are not described. Some details are inaccurate: musical performances begin in 2010, not 2005, and table tennis and martial arts do not cross in 2015—their figures are about 36 and 34. Focus on the overall contrasts and report the key trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to group information by activity, and the response moves broadly from film club to amateur dramatics and then to other series. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear, coherent summary: the opening repeats the task, while “There is activity one on top of another is down” is difficult to interpret and does not establish an overview. Connections between details are also weak, with repeated “after that” and “but” doing much of the linking. Use a clear introduction and overview, followed by logically grouped comparisons, such as the consistently high film-club figures and the contrasting changes in table tennis and amateur dramatics.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a basic set of relevant terms, including “participants,” “decrease,” “increase,” and “crossed,” so the reader can recognise the general subject and some trends. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices or spellings make the meaning less clear, such as “actions” for activities, “fastly,” “increseses,” and “activitys.” Phrases such as “one on top of another is down” are not natural descriptions of a line graph. Build a more precise range for describing data, using expressions such as “remained the highest,” “rose steadily,” “fell sharply,” and “fluctuated.” Check spelling and use standard chart terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to describe changes over time and use some connected clauses, for example, “after that it will decrease,” but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently. Tense is often unsuitable for past data: “it will decrease” and “it will increase” should use past forms. There are also problems with sentence construction and agreement, as in “The Musical performances is started in 2005,” and the opening sentence is awkwardly formed. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are inconsistent, making some statements hard to follow. Practise accurate past-tense sentences with clear subjects and verbs, such as “The number for amateur dramatics fell to about six by 2020.”

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