Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrates information on the different participants for several activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall,Table tennis showed an upward trend.Amateur dramatics goes daramtically Downword.There is a fluctuations in Film club and Martial arts.
Number of participants, Musical performances starts from 2000 and same untill reach 2005 then it goes steadily increased from 2005 to 2020 from 0% to approximately 18%.Table tennis starts from 17% and ends 57%.It goes dramatically rise from 2010 to 2020.Amateur dramatics decreased significantly.Starts from 26 percentage to 7 percentage.
Furthermore,there are some fluctuations in Amateur dramatics.sometime goes up sometime goes down.Film club remains same no upward or downword trends in this number of participant.Ratio of table tennis is dramtically increased from 20% TO 56%.In contrast,the ratio of Amateur dramatics significantely declined from 30% to approximately 8%.Musical performance ratios also rise from 0% To 18% percentage.Martial arts ratios does not changed too much as compared to others.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important patterns, including the rise in table tennis and musical performances and the decline in amateur dramatics. The overview also notes fluctuations in film club and martial arts. However, some reporting is inaccurate or unclear: film club generally stays in the low-to-mid 60s with a slight dip and later rise, rather than simply “remains same,” and amateur dramatics fluctuates only slightly at first before falling steadily, not repeatedly rising and falling throughout. The response also repeats figures and comparisons instead of selecting a concise set of key features; martial arts’ broadly stable level is mentioned but not quantified. More accurate comparisons and a clearer overview would make the summary more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an introduction, an overview and further detail, so there is some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because related information is repeated in separate places: table tennis is described as rising from about 17 to 57 and then again as increasing from 20 to 56, while the decline in amateur dramatics is also repeated. Connectors such as “Furthermore” and “In contrast” are used, but they do not consistently clarify how the points relate. Grouping the stable activities together and the contrasting rising and falling activities together would create a clearer sequence. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs and avoid repeating the same trend.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant trend vocabulary, including “upward trend,” “decreased significantly,” “fluctuations” and “steadily increased.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report awkward: “different participants” should refer to numbers of participants, and “goes dramatically rise” is not a natural collocation. There are also repeated expressions such as “ratio” and “percentage,” although the graph reports participant numbers rather than percentages. Spelling errors such as “daramtically,” “Downword” and “significantely” are noticeable. Aim for precise terms such as “figure,” “number,” “rose sharply” and “declined steadily,” and check spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. Several sentences lack correct verb forms or agreement, for example, “Amateur dramatics goes dramatically Downword” and “Martial arts ratios does not changed too much.” The sentence beginning “Number of participants, Musical performances starts…” has an unclear structure, and “starts from 17% and ends 57%” omits necessary grammatical elements. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, including missing spaces after commas and full stops. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent past-tense reporting for the period shown.
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