Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustartes data of some candicates has address in several activities in 2000 to 2020 held in australia.

Overall it evident that highest physical activities in last two decades is film club accurate same huge figure in timeline and the lowest act perform in last 20 years is musical performances in this period,held in melbourne.

First, social center in melbourne has offers such a good activities likewise film club,table tennis,martial arts or more.In 2000s the film club has raised in top rather then other acts,and his raising period in two decades same as it top figure record 60 to 70 candicates enroled.martial arts figure in 2000 to 2020 is looking like waves 35 to 40 students perform this act in this time line. table teninis have such low to high jump record in last two decades first 10 person then shift to 50,in my view table tennis is interesting for young gen,other sports has falctute in thie era.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the film club as the leading activity and note the contrasting movement in table tennis, which are relevant main features. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: musical performances were not the lowest throughout the period, as they rose from zero to 18, while amateur dramatics fell to just 6 by 2020. The response also gives only a limited account of the graph and omits the clear decline in amateur dramatics and the rise in musical performances. Some figures are imprecise: film club stayed around 60–66 rather than rising from 60 to 70, and table tennis rose from 16 to 54, not from 10 to 50. Focus on accurate overall trends and support them with selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic overall structure: an opening, an overview, and a paragraph describing several activities. The use of “Overall” and “First” also signals the purpose of sections. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow because several activities and claims are crowded into long sentences, and the final point, “other sports has falctute in thie era,” is unclear. Connections such as “likewise” and “rather then” do not clearly express the relationships between the data. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, stable or fluctuating activities versus those with strong rises or falls—and use straightforward linking phrases to show how each sentence relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some task-related vocabulary, including “figure,” “timeline,” “waves,” and “jump,” and the reader can recognise that you are describing changes over time. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “highest physical activities,” “has address,” and “top figure record.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “illustartes,” “candicates,” “teninis,” and “falctute.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Build a reliable set of terms for describing graphs—such as “participant numbers,” “remained stable,” “fluctuated,” “increased sharply,” and “declined”—and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, but control is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “Overall it evident that highest physical activities…” is missing a verb and has an unclear sentence structure, while “the film club has raised in top” uses an unsuitable verb form and construction. Agreement and tense are also problematic in “social center … has offers” and “other sports has.” Articles and sentence boundaries need attention as well. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine related ideas using accurate clauses. For graph descriptions, use consistent past-tense forms such as “rose,” “fell,” and “remained,” with correct articles and plural nouns.

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