Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph below illustartes information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, table tennis had most increase in number of participants and amateur dramatics had major decrease in the number of participants from 2000 to 2020.

Initially, there were zero participants for musical performances from 2000 to 2005 but it increased to about 13 participants in 2010 and then to about 18 in 2015 and lastly to 20 in 2020. Table tennis had about 20 participants in 2005 which remained same till 2010 and then had a significant increased to about 40 participants in 2015 and in 2020 it had about 55 participants. Amateur dramatics had 27 participants in year 2005 which decreased to 20 participants in 2010 and again fell to about 12 participants and then to about 7 participants in 2020.

Martial arts had 36 participants in year 2000 which then decreased to about 32 participants in year 2005 and inclined to about 40 participants in 2010 and then fell to about 38 participants in 2015 and again increased to 40 participants in 2020. Film club had about 63 participants in 2005 and then inclined to about 70 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You provide a clear overview of the two most notable changes: table tennis rose substantially, while amateur dramatics declined. Most figures and trends are reported accurately, including musical performances starting at zero and table tennis reaching about 55 by 2020. However, the film-club account is materially inaccurate: it was about 62 in 2005 and 66 in 2020, not 63 and 70, and its small fluctuations are omitted. The martial-arts figures are also overstated for 2010, 2015 and 2020. The response covers the main activities, but some comparisons and details are less fully or accurately presented than others. For a stronger report, check each series against the graph and include the film club’s broadly stable pattern in the overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and detail paragraphs that group several activities. This makes the main message accessible, and time markers such as “Initially,” “in 2010” and “in 2020” help show sequence. However, the detailed information is placed in one long paragraph, and the account moves between series without a clear grouping principle. Some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated “and then” and “again,” while “which remained same” has an unclear reference. Separate the rising or stable series from the declining one, and use more varied, precise links to make comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “participants,” “significant increase” and “decreased,” and the reader can understand the trends you describe. There are, however, several inaccurate or unnatural choices that limit precision. “Inclined to” is not the right verb for a rising figure, and “had most increase” and “had major decrease” are awkward formulations. “Significant increased” also uses the wrong word form. The spelling error “illustartes” is noticeable, and “remained same” is not idiomatic. Aim for accurate collocations and forms such as “rose to,” “experienced the largest increase,” and “remained unchanged”; proofread spelling and phrasing before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple statements and longer sentences with time clauses, for example, “Initially, there were zero participants…” and the sentence tracing table tennis from 2005 to 2020. This gives the report some structural variety, and the meaning is generally clear. Some grammatical errors remain: “which remained same” is missing an article, “a significant increased” has an incorrect form after the article, and “in year 2005” needs an article. The long sequences joined by “and then” also make sentence boundaries and punctuation less controlled. Use shorter sentences when listing several changes, and check articles, noun forms and punctuation while retaining the useful range of sentence structures.

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