Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the numbers of participants for different activities (Film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances) at one social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the highest number of participants take part in film club activity throughout the period and remained at top of the list till the end. While, the table tennis was the least popular in 2000. Meawhile, Musical performances activity was not introduced in 2000. it was launched in 2005, first time.
Firstly, the number of participants in film club activity was around 65 in 2000, However the number dipped slightly in 2010 and then, again reached at 66. As well as, Martial arts participants fluctuation slightly in 2000 the number of participents was just about 37. after the numbers minor decreased to 31 and the increased to 37 at the end it reached 37 in 2020.
Secondly, the number of participents in Amateur activities was 26 in 2000, While, it was just increased to 29 in 2005 and then gradually decreased till 2020 and reached just over 5. But the number of table tennis participents was around 17, it increase slightly till 2010 after that the number odf participents surged sharply and reached 50.
Lastly, Musical performances start in 2005 from zero and increase slightly and around 15 participents take part in this activity in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You cover all five activities and identify several important patterns: film club remains the most popular, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis rises markedly. Most reported figures are broadly consistent with the chart. However, the overview contains a significant misreading: table tennis was not the least popular in 2000; musical performances had no participants, while table tennis had about 16. You also say musical performances began in 2005, although the chart shows zero in both 2000 and 2005 and a rise beginning by 2010. Some details are imprecise or incomplete, such as the table-tennis endpoint (about 54) and the changing martial-arts figures. A more accurate overview and clearer selection of key comparisons would strengthen the response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the activities. Sequencing expressions such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the account, and the main trends are generally grouped sensibly. However, the organisation is sometimes mechanical, and some links are unclear or awkward. For example, “While, the table tennis was the least popular in 2000. Meawhile” does not connect the contrast smoothly, and the overview’s sentence about musical performances is difficult to follow. The final paragraph also combines a brief account of musical performances with no comparison to the other series. Use clearer topic sentences and connect related trends with more precise referencing and contrast.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use a relevant range of chart vocabulary, including “dipped slightly,” “gradually decreased,” and “surged sharply,” which helps describe movement. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “reached at 66,” “participants fluctuation slightly,” and “the number odf participants” do not sound natural. “Amateur activities” is also less precise than the chart label “amateur dramatics.” Spelling errors such as “Meawhile,” “participents,” and “odf” are noticeable, and repeated use of “number of participants” limits variety. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “the figure rose to” and “participation in table tennis,” while checking spelling and retaining the activity names used in the graph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including contrasts with “while” and time clauses such as “after that,” so there is some structural variety. However, errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation are frequent enough to make several sentences awkward. For example, “While, the table tennis was the least popular in 2000. Meawhile” uses an incomplete or poorly connected contrast, while “it increase slightly” and “the number dipped slightly … and then, again reached” show problems with verb forms and sentence construction. Capitalisation after full stops is also inconsistent, as in “it was launched.” Use complete sentences, maintain past tense consistently, and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation when joining clauses.
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