Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The graph illustrates different activities which were done by the numbers of participants at one social centre in Melbourn, Australia from 2000 to 2020. The activities includes film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.

Overall, the most noticeable feature is that the number of participants involved in the film club was very high and in musical performances was very low. While participantation in table tennis increased from 2010 to 2020, participation in amateur dramatics decreased during the same period.

Activites in the film club recorded the highest number of participant. It was 60-70% from 2000 to 2020. In 2000, participation in table tennis was just under 20% and in till 2010 it was 20%. However it increased to just over 50% in 2020. By contrast, 30% people engaged in amateur dramatics in 2000. It dropped to 20% in 2010 and gradually declined to less than 10% in 2020.

People started engaged in musical performaces few years later as 10% people involved in the activity in 2010. However it increased to approximately 15% in 2020. Participation in maritial arts were fluctuating over the period, but it was within 30% to 40% from 2000 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the main overall patterns: film club remains the most popular activity, musical performances begin later and stay comparatively low, table tennis rises strongly, and amateur dramatics declines. It also reports several relevant figures, such as table tennis reaching just over 50 and amateur dramatics falling below 10 by 2020. However, the description sometimes over-generalises or misstates the measure: the chart shows participant numbers, not percentages, so phrases such as “60–70%” and “30% people” are inaccurate. The film-club figures are also better described as remaining in the low-to-mid 60s. More precise comparisons, including the sharp table-tennis rise after 2010, would make the account more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a clear introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and the information generally progresses from the overall picture to individual activities. Contrast markers such as “While” and “By contrast,” and the time references help readers follow the comparisons. The overview also usefully groups the rising and falling trends. Some links are less smooth, however: “in till 2010” and “However” at the start of the musical-performances sentence make the progression awkward, while the final martial-arts point feels added rather than integrated into the comparison. Grouping activities more deliberately—for example, stable series together and contrasting trends together—would make the progression more consistently fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a relevant range of task vocabulary, including “participation,” “increased,” “declined,” “fluctuating” and “approximately,” and these choices communicate the main trends. However, inaccurate word forms, spelling and collocations are noticeable: “participantation,” “Activites,” “performaces” and “maritial” detract from control, while “People started engaged” and “the number of participants … was very high” are not natural expressions. Repeated use of “participation” and “increased” also limits flexibility. Use precise chart language such as “the figure for,” “stood at” and “rose sharply,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make the vocabulary more accurate and natural for an academic summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence structure, including a complex overview sentence beginning “While” and contrastive sentences using “However” and “By contrast.” The main trends remain understandable, but grammatical errors occur across the response. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “The activities includes,” a missing verb in “participation in table tennis was just under 20,” and the faulty construction “People started engaged.” Articles and number agreement also need attention in “the highest number of participant.” These errors show that complex forms are attempted but are not yet controlled consistently. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete clause structures, and proofread each sentence for agreement, articles and missing verbs.

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