Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph gives information of different activities and number of participants at social center in Australia over a period of 11 years.

Overall, the graph shows 5 kind of different activities in which 2 activities whose number of participants ups and down while two activities where number of participants increases

Lets start with club flim the number of participants was 63 but slowly decrease in 2010 and again come to previous position. Next one martial art there were fluctuations increase and decrease in all years. later on table tennis and musical performances both number of participants sharply upward in 2020. Futhermore, number of participants in amateur dramactics

sharply decline in 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the five activities and mention several relevant trends, including the rise in table tennis and musical performances and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: it says two activities fluctuate and two increase, without identifying them clearly, and film-club participation recovered after falling rather than simply returning to its previous position. The response also gives very little supporting data, omitting the strong table-tennis rise from about 16 to 54 and the fall in amateur dramatics from about 26 to 6. The report is 112 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail and coverage. Develop a clear overview and compare key figures across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction is followed by an overview and then comments on individual activities. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Next,” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview is incomplete and the body is compressed into a single run of loosely connected observations. “Lets start with club flim” is an abrupt transition, and the final point about amateur dramatics is left unfinished. Grouping the activities by their trends, then using separate paragraphs for the overview and details, would make the comparisons clearer. Use linking expressions to show contrasts and changes rather than relying mainly on simple sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuations,” “increases,” and “decline,” so the reader can recognise the general trends being described. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “5 kind of different activities,” “club flim,” and “amateur dramactics.” Phrases such as “number of participants ups and down” are also not natural descriptions of a graph. These errors make parts of the report harder to understand and reduce precision. Practise standard trend language and accurate activity names, and use varied verbs such as “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” and “fluctuated” to describe the data more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “The line graph gives information of different activities and number of participants” is missing articles and uses an incorrect preposition pattern. In “Overall, the graph shows 5 kind … in which 2 activities whose number …,” the clause structure is incomplete and agreement is faulty. Verb forms are also inconsistent in “was 63 but slowly decrease … and again come,” while several sentences lack full stops or clear sentence boundaries. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Build accurate simple sentences first, then practise past-tense reporting and clauses with “while” or “whereas.”

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