Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given line graph illustrates the number of people who participated in divergent activities at a particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club has most participated activity throughout except a minor decrease in 2005 and 2010 (65 & 60 participants respectively). Whereas as table tennis has seen the swelled popularity it started from around 16 individuals in 2000, 20 in 2005 and 2010, almost double in 2015 and 50 in 2020.

Martial has seen its own ups and down and ended at approximately 37 participants which is the same number it started in 2000. Amateur dramatics has been the least favourite activity, in 2000 around 25 people were interested has a slightest surge in 2005 to 30 and it kept decreasing afterwards and dropped till 5 people. Musical performances have show a dramatic interest as nobody was keen to participate until 2005 and it kept increasing afterwards and there were 12, 15, and approx 20 people willing to try this in 2010, 2015, 2020 respectively.

To conclude, film club has been the lion's share humankind captivated by it and amateur dramatics showed the least people willing to participate.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover all five activities and identify the main patterns: film club remains the most popular, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines to the lowest level. The overview is clear, and most figures are close to the chart, including the table-tennis increase and the fall in amateur dramatics. Some details are less precise: film club is about 64 in 2000, not 65, and martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than showing a clearly described sequence. The statement that musical performances attracted nobody “until 2005” is ambiguous, since the figure is zero in both 2000 and 2005. Your final sentence repeats the overview rather than adding a useful comparison. More exact reporting and a clearer account of the smaller fluctuations would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression from an introduction to an overview and then details, and the activities are grouped in a generally sensible way. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Whereas,” and “afterwards” help signal relationships between trends. However, some connections are awkward or incomplete: “Whereas as table tennis…” does not form a clear contrast, and the long paragraph combines several series without consistently guiding the reader through them. The final “To conclude” repeats information already given, so it adds little to the progression. To move further, use clearer topic sentences and organise the details into two focused groups—for example, rising or stable activities versus declining ones—while ensuring each linking phrase fits the sentence structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “decrease,” “surge,” “dropped,” and “increasing,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more expressive language, such as “swelled popularity” and “lion’s share,” but these are not natural or precise in this context. Several word choices and collocations weaken clarity: “divergent activities,” “most participated activity,” and “showed a dramatic interest” do not describe the data idiomatically. Prefer straightforward, accurate chart language over decorative expressions. For example, say that table tennis “grew substantially in popularity” and that film club “had the highest participation.” This would make your vocabulary more controlled while retaining enough variety for the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, and the reader can usually follow the trends. However, some grammatical errors recur in sentence construction, verb forms, and agreement. For example, “Whereas as table tennis has seen…” is an incomplete or malformed contrast, while “Musical performances have show” uses an incorrect verb form. In “Amateur dramatics has been the least favourite activity, in 2000 around 25 people were interested has a slightest surge,” clauses are joined without clear grammatical control, and the article in “a slightest surge” is incorrect. The final sentence also lacks a clear grammatical relationship between its two ideas. Practise building complete sentences with accurate tense and agreement, and use full stops or conjunctions to separate clauses.

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