Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate the number of participants in five different activitiesin 2000 to 2020. Overall, it is clear that the film club had the highest number of participants in every year, The table tennis showed n clear rose. The Amateur dramatics showed in clear fall, In 2000, about 65 people were in the film club. The 65 people about in 2020 were same and the number of prticipants are fall in 2010 about 60 people. The table tennis had about 17 people in 2000. They sowlely rose in 2010 had about 20 people and they was sharply rose in 2020 about 56 people. The Martical arts in 2000 about 36 people and the same 36 people in 2020, The Amateur dramatics in 2000 had about 27 people and they sharply reduce in 2020 7 people .The Musical performances was no participants in 2000 and 2005 ,but they started in 2010 in 10 people and 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main overall pattern that the film club remained the most popular activity, and you report several relevant figures, including its fall to around 60 in 2010 and table tennis’s rise to about 56 by 2020. You also cover the decline in amateur dramatics and the later start of musical performances. However, the overview is incomplete: “The table tennis showed n clear rose” and “The Amateur dramatics showed in clear fall” are unclear, and the musical-performances trend is left unfinished after 2020. Some comparisons are also inaccurate or imprecise: film-club participation was about 64 in 2000 and 66 in 2020, not the same, while martial arts fluctuated rather than simply remaining unchanged. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons would strengthen the report.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response includes an opening statement, an attempt at an overview, and details about all five activities, so the reader can identify the general subject and some trends. However, the information is presented as one continuous block, with no clear separation between the overview and supporting details. Ideas often run together—for example, the film-club figures are followed immediately by table tennis, then martial arts and amateur dramatics—so comparisons and stages are difficult to follow. Linking words such as “Overall,” “but,” and “and” are used, but connections are often mechanical or unclear. Organise the response into a short introduction, a concise overview, and two detail paragraphs grouping related trends; use clear time references and pronouns to make each comparison easy to track.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “sharply,” “rose,” “fall,” and “started,” which helps convey changes over time. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning less clear, such as “showed n clear rose,” “sowlely rose,” “Martical arts,” and “sharply reduce.” The repeated use of “about” and “people” also makes the description less precise and varied. Choose standard trend expressions and use them accurately—for example, “increased steadily,” “rose sharply,” “declined considerably,” and “the number of participants.” Check spelling carefully, especially for activity names, and avoid using “same” when the figures are only similar rather than identical.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts several sentence forms, including an overview and clauses joined with “but,” and the reader can generally recognise the intended trends. However, sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making relationships between figures unclear. Examples include “The line graph illustrate,” “The 65 people about in 2020 were same,” and “The Musical performances was no participants.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, word order, articles, and sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent: several ideas are joined in long strings, while full stops and commas are missing or misplaced. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “The number of film-club participants fell to about 60 in 2010, before rising to 66 in 2020.”
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