Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This grapgh illustrate information on number of paticipants for different operations at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for specific period of time between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that there were significant difference in the main feature shown in the given information with some aspects and being more prominent than the others.

In 2005, no one paticipate in musical performance but then it gradually increased up to 19 people in 2020.almost 18 people participate in table tannis in and its percentage remains stable till 2010 and then it boost to almost 55 in 2020.

Film club was at top in 2000 almost 64 people particiapte and remain stable till 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant features, including the rise in musical performances and table tennis and the film club’s consistently high participation. However, the overview is vague (“significant difference” and “more prominent”) and does not clearly summarise the main contrasts. Some details are inaccurate: musical performances began at zero in 2000, not 2005, and table tennis had about 16 participants in 2000, not 18. The film club fluctuated slightly rather than remaining stable throughout. Martial arts and the sharp decline in amateur dramatics are omitted, leaving the report only partially developed. The response is also 105 words, below the 150-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded from this count. Add a clear overview and cover the key trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing selected activities. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the progression is limited: the overview does not identify specific trends, and the final paragraph moves to the film club without a clear comparison or link to the preceding details. Connections such as “but then” and “and then” are used, but the relationships between changes are not always expressed precisely. The long sentence about table tennis combines several points awkwardly, while the report ends without a concluding comparison. Grouping the rising activities together and contrasting them with declining or stable ones would create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increased,” “stable,” and “remains,” which helps communicate basic trends. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make the report less clear or less appropriate for an academic summary. Examples include “operations” for activities, “percentage” when describing participant numbers, and “boost” for a rise in figures. There are also repeated misspellings such as “grapgh,” “paticipants,” and “table tannis.” Use accurate terms such as “participants,” “number,” “rose,” and “declined,” and check spelling carefully. More precise trend language would help you describe changes without relying on general expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the basic meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. For example, “there were significant difference” has a subject–verb agreement and plural error, while “Film club was at top … and remain stable” shifts incorrectly between past forms. The sentence beginning “almost 18 people participate in table tannis” lacks a clear grammatical connection to the following clause, and punctuation is inconsistent, including the missing space after “2020.” Use complete sentences with consistent past-tense verbs, and check articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. Shorter, accurately controlled sentences would make the data easier to understand.

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