Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrate the quantity of people who are taking part in various activities at social insitute in Melbourne,Australia.

Overall, the graph describes number of participants in the different sectors.The film club has the largest segment and amateur dramatics has contributed least in these activities.

First, the film club has contributed the most in this graph where rate of people is about 65 in the start and end of the period it is almost 68. After that table tennis has very low rate in the begining but in the end it has massive increase and it is about 55 in the year 2020.Than the martial arts has also contributed.

Secondly, the amateur has a slightly increase in 2005 but it decrease dramatically at the last of time 2020. The musical performances has no contribute in the begins however in the year 2005 it is increased and got tp

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the film club as the largest activity and amateur dramatics as the smallest, and you note the strong rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the account is incomplete and some details are inaccurate: the film club ends at about 66, not 68, and musical performances first appear in 2010, not 2005. The final sentence is cut off, so this series is not properly described, and martial arts is mentioned without reporting its fluctuations. The overview also does not clearly summarise the main changes across the period. The response is one word below the required minimum. To improve, complete the report and select accurate start-and-end figures and key trends for all five activities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and two body paragraphs, and sequencing phrases such as “First” and “Secondly” help signal the order of points. However, progression is limited: the first body paragraph moves between film club, table tennis and martial arts without developing a clear comparison, while the second ends abruptly at “got tp”. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “After that” and “Than the martial arts has also contributed,” which do not explain how the series relate. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, stable or fluctuating activities versus those with major rises or falls—and use linking phrases to show those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “largest,” “massive increase,” “decrease dramatically” and “participants.” However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as “quantity of people,” “largest segment,” and “has contributed” when describing participant numbers. Spelling errors, including “insitute,” “begining” and “decrease” used where “decreased” is needed, also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart language and accurate forms: describe numbers as rising, falling, remaining stable or fluctuating, and refer to the activities as categories or series rather than sectors. Proofreading would help prevent errors from distracting the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including “After that table tennis has very low rate in the begining but in the end it has massive increase.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “The line graph illustrate” and “The musical performances has,” missing articles in “at social insitute” and “in the begins,” and inconsistent tense in descriptions of past data. The final sentence is incomplete, and punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases. Practise forming complete past-tense sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement, articles and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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