Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graphes illustrates the number of individuals who take part in curricular activities from 2000 to 2020 at public center in Melbourne, Australia.

Overall, the numbers have been increasing rapidly since 2000 to 2020 in different field of activities. Starting from 2000 where the musical perfomances has not register single candidate till 2005 where it starts and goes to 15 members till 2020. By looking at the table tennis candidates they increase rapidly from 15 to upto 55 participants till the end of 2020. However, as compared to table tennis, In 2010 it was a turning point for both the participants as the candidates for amateur theater playes were comparatively decreases rapidly from 25 to 5 candidates ramaining till 2020.

Furthermore, the the students that have been a part of martial arts were at a normal pace since 2000. Their members did not decrese in 10 to 20 candidates but their flow has ups and downs. On the other hand, as compared to the candidates from all the other acitivites , the film club members were almost at a normal pace, Having participants around 65 at the start of 2000 till 2020. they face lose of some members in 2010 but recovered in the upcoming years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns: table tennis rises markedly, amateur dramatics declines, and the film club remains the largest activity. These points are broadly supported by the graph. However, the overview says participation increased rapidly across the different activities, which is too general and inaccurate: amateur dramatics falls, while martial arts fluctuates around a similar level. Some details are also misreported. Musical performances begin at zero in 2000 and 2005, then rise to about 18 by 2020; they do not start in 2005 or reach 15 at that point. The response also gives little precise comparison of the series. A clearer overview and more accurate, selectively reported figures would make the summary more complete and better grounded in the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an opening, an overview, and further discussion of the activities, so there is some organisation and the reader can identify the main subjects. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview moves directly into details about musical performances and table tennis, then shifts to amateur dramatics, martial arts, and the film club without a clear grouping or sequence. Linking phrases such as “However,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other hand” are used, but some do not express a clear contrast or relationship. For example, “as compared to table tennis” does not clearly connect the following point about amateur dramatics. Organise the body paragraphs around the main trends—rising, falling, and relatively stable—and use references and transitions that make those relationships explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “increase rapidly,” “turning point,” “ups and downs,” and “recovered.” This gives you a basic range for reporting change. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or imprecise, and some expressions sound unnatural in this context. “Curricular activities” does not accurately describe the social-centre activities, while “normal pace” is unclear when describing participant numbers. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “graphes,” “perfomances,” “decrese,” and “acitivites.” Use standard chart language consistently, such as “participants,” “rose,” “fluctuated,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including longer sentences with contrast and time clauses, but control is uneven. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in phrases such as “the musical perfomances has not register” and “the candidates … were comparatively decreases.” Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “at public center” and “Starting from 2000 where…,” while the final sentence shifts into a lower-case “they” after a full stop. These errors sometimes make relationships between events difficult to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “Musical performances had no participants in 2000 or 2005, but the figure rose thereafter.” Check agreement, tense, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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