Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph provide data of participants from six different activites at a social center in Melbourne for the period of 2000 to 2020.
Musical performances were not started till 2005. When it started it jumped over to the peak and it reached around 20 in only 25 years. On the other hand Amateur dramatics was around 25 it rise in few numbers but is fall to 5 in 2020.
Film club and Martial arts were flucutating in the numbers after 20 years it was aproximatily same but Table tennis started on low number but it grow in 2010 and reached on the secound higher number.
In my observation, Table tennis parricipants showed there intrest more rather than Amateur dramatics it rise but fall of the Actresses was very high in the last one and half decated. There is an other boom in Musical perforamces it started after five years but took good place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response identifies several relevant trends, including the decline in amateur dramatics and the growth of table tennis, and it notes that musical performances began later than the other activities. However, the overview is incomplete and some details are inaccurate: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005, and rose gradually to about 18 rather than jumping to a peak of 20. Table tennis rose strongly, especially after 2010, while film club remained the most popular activity throughout; these key comparisons are not clearly summarised. The statement that film club and martial arts fluctuated is broadly relevant, but their contrasting levels are not explained. To improve, give a concise overview of the main rises, falls and stable series, then support it with accurate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some grouping of related information: the response discusses musical performances and amateur dramatics together, then mentions film club, martial arts and table tennis. Basic linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In my observation” also show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response lacks a clear overall progression from an introduction to a distinct overview and then well-organised details. Several sentences combine unrelated points, and references such as “it” in “it grow in 2010” are unclear. The final paragraph repeats the growth of musical performances and table tennis rather than adding a clearly organised comparison. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and details, and make each sentence focus on one or two related trends.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “fluctuating,” “reached,” “rise” and “fall,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “jumped over to the peak,” “reached on the second higher number” and “there interest more” are not natural ways to describe the graph. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “activites,” “flucutating,” “aproximatily” and “perforamces.” Aim for precise trend language such as “increased steadily,” “remained relatively stable,” and “rose sharply,” and check spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts to use both simple sentences and longer structures, including a contrast with “On the other hand” and a time clause beginning “When it started.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction, verb forms and agreement. For example, “The line graph provide” needs subject–verb agreement, while “it rise in few numbers but is fall” has incorrect verb forms and an unclear structure. “Table tennis started on low number but it grow” also contains errors in articles and tense. These problems sometimes make the intended trend difficult to understand. Practise describing past data consistently in the past tense, and build accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb before adding clauses.
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