Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates different activities held at a social centre in Melbourne,Australia and number of people who participated in those activities in between the years [redacted phone].

Overall film club had the highest participants followed by martial arts during the twenty years.Table tennis participants has risen while amateur dramatics has fallen over time.Musical performances has risen steadily overtime.

Film club has the highest participants ranging above 60 in 2000 that has reduced slightly to 60 in 2010 and then increased above 60 steadily till 2020.Martial arts participants number fluctuated in between 30 and 40 in the 20 year span.

The amateur dramatics started with participants number near 30 in 2000 rose a bit in 2005 but the number sharply declined over time to nearly 5 in 2020.Table tennis started with number close to 20 in 2000 rose steadily till 2005 with the number continuous till 2010 and rose drastically over next ten years.During 2010 number of participants in amateur dramatics and table tennis overlapped and then one rose while other fall greatly till 2020.

Participation in musical performances started after 2005 rose above 10 till 2020.People participated more in it in comparison to the amateur dramatics till 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises substantially, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances increase after 2005. The overview also makes a useful comparison between the two activities that move in opposite directions. Several details support this, including film club falling to about 60 in 2010 before recovering and amateur dramatics ending at roughly 5–6. However, some trends are described imprecisely: table tennis is said to rise “steadily” to 2005, although it then stays level through 2010 before climbing sharply. The final comparison with amateur dramatics is relevant but could be clearer about the figures. More precise reporting of key stages and values would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the activities. Information generally progresses from the most prominent series to the declining and newer activities, and phrases such as “Overall” and “then” help signal relationships. This gives the report a coherent arrangement. Some connections are less clear, however. The sentence about the lines “overlapped” in 2010 is difficult to interpret, and the final sentence does not specify the comparison as directly as it could. Several ideas are also packed into long sentences, particularly the table-tennis description. Use clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references to the activities and years to make the progression smoother and cohesion less dependent on repeated sequencing words.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “fluctuated,” “declined,” “rose,” and “participants.” These choices communicate the main trends, and “rose drastically” conveys the marked increase in table tennis. However, some wording is repetitive or imprecise: “highest participants” is used more than once, while “number continuous” and “overlapped” do not clearly express the intended data relationships. “Started after 2005” is also less exact than saying that participation began in 2010. Aim for more natural collocations and a wider selection of trend verbs, while keeping the descriptions precise. These improvements would add flexibility and accuracy to an otherwise understandable vocabulary range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while,” “but,” and “and then.” The main meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain across the response. For example, “Film club had the highest participants” lacks a natural grammatical construction, and “Musical performances has risen” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “the number continuous till 2010,” the verb form is incorrect, while “one rose while other fall” has errors in articles and tense. Sentence boundaries and spacing after full stops also need attention. Check agreement, verb forms, and articles carefully, and divide sentences that contain several stages of change. More consistent control would strengthen the range you are already attempting.

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