Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph shows the no of peoples participated into different activities at one socsil center situated in Melbourn a city of austraila between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remained the top of the line acitvity throughout the peroid while martial art wsa the second most popular activity in start but it was overtaken bytable tennis and went to the third one while other two activites (amateur dramatics and Muscial performance) has seen less participation.

The participation of people film club remained consistant and highest as the figure was between 60 to 70 across the two decades In contrast the table tennis started form 18 participants and rose sharply in 2010 ,overtook the martial art in 2015 and reached upto 50 in 2020 while the martial arts has remained alomst streight between 30 t0 40 and make its postion at number three.

Moreover, amateure dramatics started 25 during 2000 and seen little increase and then droped drametically and went to lowest . finally acitivity which was started in 2005 and was last in line musical performnace which increased faster and become sencoond last with holding morethen 10 peoples in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall patterns: the film club remains the most popular, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines. You also compare the activities, noting that table tennis overtakes martial arts and that musical performances grow from no participants to a higher figure. These are relevant features and support a clear overview. Some details, however, are imprecise or inaccurate: table tennis begins at about 16, not 18, and its sharp rise occurs after 2010 rather than simply “in 2010.” Musical performances begin in 2010, not 2005, and martial arts is not consistently the third-ranked activity because table tennis surpasses it by 2015. More precise reporting of these stages and rankings would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the trends. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Moreover” help signal the relationships between points, and the reader can follow the broad comparison across the period. However, some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “while other two activities … has seen less participation” and “finally activity which was started in 2005.” The final paragraph also combines the decline in amateur dramatics with the rise of musical performances without a clear transition between them. Use separate, focused sentences and make references explicit—for example, name musical performances directly and state when they first appear—to improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “remained,” “overtaken,” “rose sharply,” and “dropped dramatically,” which helps describe trends. However, the range and control are limited by repeated basic wording such as “started,” “increased,” and “participation,” as well as frequent spelling errors: “socsil,” “Melbourn,” “consistant,” and “drametically.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “top of the line activity,” “went to the third one,” and “holding morethen 10 peoples.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning harder to interpret. Build a more accurate set of trend expressions and check spelling and collocations carefully; for example, use “ranked first,” “fell to third place,” and “stood at around 18 participants.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “in contrast,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms occur throughout. Examples include “the no of peoples participated into,” “while other two activities … has seen,” and “the martial arts has remained,” where articles, verb forms, agreement, or sentence construction are not controlled. Some sentences also run together or lack clear punctuation, as in the long sentence beginning “The participation of people film club…” This limits the range you can use accurately. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences, checking singular and plural agreement, and separating related trends into shorter sentences before attempting more complex comparisons.

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