Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for various activities at one public centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that, table tennis saw the most significant increase over the period, while Amateur dramatics saw the opposite trend. It is also noticable that the figures for Martial atrts fluctuated over the period.
Looking at the details, in 2000, the figure for Film club stood at approx 62. This number then firstly decrease and after suddenly increase and end of the period reach at 65. Move to the Martial arts they fluctuated during the period and end of the period reach at 39.
Turning to the remaining category, the amount of Amateur dramatics showed large decrease and end of the period participants number is only 9. In contrast Table tennis player show highly intrest and large increase in participants and end of period reach at 51.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the main contrast accurately: table tennis rises substantially, while amateur dramatics declines, and you note that martial arts fluctuates. However, the account is only partial because it omits musical performances, which begin at zero and rise to about 18, and gives little detail about the film club’s overall stability. Some reported figures are also imprecise: film club starts at about 64, dips slightly, then recovers to around 66; martial arts ends near 36, rather than 39. The overview is relevant, but the body needs more accurate comparisons and coverage of the main series to make the summary more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs. Phrases such as “Overall” and “Turning to the remaining category” help signal the stages of the report. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes awkward: “This number then firstly decrease and after suddenly increase” is difficult to follow, and the final paragraph groups two contrasting trends without explaining their relationship clearly. The film club and martial arts are discussed together, but the account does not consistently compare their patterns. Use clearer sequencing and linking, and organise the details so that each paragraph presents a coherent comparison rather than a list of separate observations.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “significant increase,” and “opposite trend,” which helps communicate the broad patterns. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “saw highly intrest,” “table tennis player,” and “the amount of Amateur dramatics.” Spelling errors, including “noticable,” “atrts,” and “intrest,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural expressions for chart data, such as “the number of participants,” “rose sharply,” and “fell steadily.” Varying verbs for increases, decreases and stability would make the description more flexible and exact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer structures, including the overview sentence contrasting table tennis and amateur dramatics, but most sentences rely on simple patterns and several are grammatically faulty. For example, “This number then firstly decrease and after suddenly increase and end of the period reach at 65” has problems with verb forms, sequencing and sentence construction. “They fluctuated during the period and end of the period reach at 39” also lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. Articles and prepositions are sometimes missing or incorrect, as in “in 2000” followed by “end of the period.” Practise past-tense reporting and complete clauses, while keeping sentences concise enough to control accurately.
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