Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this line graph the information of participants for different activities at one social center in melbourne is given between 2000 and 2020

From year 2000, all the activities show fluctation. some show rapid increase and some show gradual increase.

The film club shows slight decrease at 65 from year 2000 to 2010 and shows slight increase from year 2010 to 2020. Martial arts starts at almost 47 from 2000 and decreases to 2005 then increases in 2010 then decreases in next 5 years and then goes stable from 2015 to 2020

Amateur dramatics increases initially from alomst 26 at 2000 and then decreases rapidly from 2005 to 2020. Table tennis increases from 16 in 2000 to 2005. In 2010 it shows rapid increase until 2020. Musical preformance starts from 2005 and increases rapidly until 2010 then it increases slowly from year 2010 to 2015 then goes almost stable until 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all five activities and report several broad movements, including the decline in amateur dramatics and the rise in table tennis. However, the account is incomplete and contains important inaccuracies: martial arts begins at about 36, not 47, and table tennis rises sharply mainly from 2010 to 2020, rather than showing a rapid increase from 2005. The film club falls from about 64 to 60 before recovering, not from 65, and musical performances begin in 2000 at zero, rather than starting in 2005. There is no clear overview highlighting the main contrasts, such as film club remaining highest and table tennis growing most strongly. The response is also 143 words, below the required 150; the eight words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Add a concise overview and accurate key figures to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly chronological approach and discusses the activities in separate sentences, so the reader can identify the subject of each point. However, it is presented as one paragraph and lacks a clear overall progression from an overview to grouped details. The opening statements, “all the activities show fluctation” and “some show rapid increase,” are general and do not guide the reader toward the most important comparisons. Linking is also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “then” and “from … to …,” and some transitions make the trends difficult to follow. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and detail paragraphs that group related trends. Use clearer comparisons and varied linking expressions to make the sequence of information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “decreases,” “increases,” “rapidly,” and “stable,” which allows you to describe basic trends. There is some attempt to vary descriptions, for example “slight increase” and “decreases rapidly.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or awkward, including “the information of participants … is given” and “starts from 2005.” Spelling errors such as “fluctation,” “alomst,” and “preformance” also reduce accuracy. Choose more precise expressions for movement and comparison, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a series as “stood at” a figure, “fell to” a lower point, or “rose steadily,” rather than relying repeatedly on “shows” and “increases.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several stages within sentences, as in the description of martial arts, and the reader can generally understand the intended sequence. However, sentence structures are limited, with many points joined through repeated “and” or “then,” and errors occur frequently. The opening, “In this line graph the information … is given,” has an awkward grammatical construction, while “From year 2000” is missing an article. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent: “melbourne” is not capitalised, and several sentences lack full stops or commas. Practise writing clear past-tense comparisons using a subject and verb for each trend, and divide long sequences into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences. More accurate sentence patterns would make the data easier to interpret.

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