Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph demonstrates thre information about the numbers of participants for different activities at social center in Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall,the number of participants are rising within the given period of time. Where film club has the highest number of participants within period and musical performance had the least number of participants.Table tennis undergoes highest rise and Amatuer dramatics faces dramatic fdecrease among all.
The number of participants in martial arts howered around 35 within the whole period,While there is a rapid drop in number of participants in amature dramatics from 2005 to 2020,it is only one which faces such a dramatic drop among all.Table tennis had the terrific rise among all it rose's dramatically from 2010 onwards.
The film club had the most participants from the start it fluctuated around 65 participants. The musical performances had zero participants till 2005,afterwards it undergoes steady rise annually till 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important features: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises strongly, and amateur dramatics declines. These observations are broadly supported by the graph. However, the overview says participant numbers are rising overall, which is too general: martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s, while amateur dramatics falls substantially. Some trends also need more precise reporting; for example, table tennis rises from about 20 in 2010 to 54 in 2020, and musical performances begin increasing in 2010, not annually from 2005. The response is 143 words, below the 150-word minimum, and this limits the detail provided. Add accurate comparisons and key figures to cover the main features more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the activities. This helps the reader identify the main subject and some key trends. However, progression within the body is uneven: the second paragraph combines martial arts, amateur dramatics and table tennis, while the final paragraph returns to film club and musical performances without a clear comparison. Linking words such as “Where” and “While” do not always connect the ideas accurately, and punctuation spacing makes some transitions difficult to follow. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, grouping the stable series together and the sharply changing series together—and use linking phrases only where their relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “fluctuated,” “steady rise,” and “dramatic drop,” so the reader can understand the general direction of change. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “terrific rise,” “faces dramatic decrease,” and “undergoes highest rise.” Spelling errors, including “thre,” “Amatuer,” and “fdecrease,” also reduce accuracy. Some repetition of “participants” and “rise” limits the range. Aim for precise, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe a series as “increased sharply” or “declined considerably,” rather than using less natural combinations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “While” and a sentence describing change over time. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and verb forms are frequent enough to make parts of the response less smooth. For example, “the number of participants are rising” should use a singular verb, and “at social center” needs an article. The sentence beginning “Where film club…” is not a complete, well-connected clause, while “it rose’s dramatically” has an incorrect verb form and punctuation. Use shorter, controlled sentences first, then add accurate comparisons with “while” or “whereas.” Check subject–verb agreement and separate complete sentences with appropriate punctuation.
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