Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates information on the numbers of participants for diffrent activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Film club was all time most popular and participant over the decade. Martial arts, was steady in participanat over the period. Amatuer dramatics, was intially moderate participants but, later it was go down at all over the same period. Table tennis, intially started with low participants.However, it had grew consequently over the same period and become a second most participants activity. Musical performences, no participants in begining later it had gradually rose.

Firsty, Film club had begun with 65 participants which was high all the time later, it had grew around of 70 participants. While, by 2020 it was become most participants activity all the time. Martial arts, was started with more than 35 participants in 2000. However, it had steadlily fluctuate in the graph. Amateur dramatics, had concurrently droping the participants from 2000 to 2020, moreover it was does down at the most as compare to other by 2020. Although table tennis, had begun with only around of 20 participants in 2000 and later it had reached around 60 participants which was second high activity all the time. Musical performances, had begun with no participant from 2000, then in 2005 it started with 10 participants then grew up gradually and by 2020 it had 20 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall patterns: the film club remains the most popular, table tennis rises substantially, amateur dramatics declines, and musical performances grow from zero. These are relevant features, and you include figures to support several points. However, some details are inaccurate: the film club ends at about 66, not around 70, and table tennis reaches about 54, not 60. Musical performances first have participants in 2010, rather than 2005. The overview also says table tennis became the second-most popular activity, but martial arts remains higher in 2020. The response covers the chart, though these misreadings and the limited comparison of the series make some features less clear or fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, beginning with an introduction, followed by a summary of trends and then more detailed reporting. This helps the reader identify the activities being discussed. However, the progression is not consistently clear because the overview and detail paragraphs repeat several points, and the order of information shifts between activities without a strong organising principle. Linking words such as “However,” “moreover,” and “Although” are sometimes used inaccurately or do not show a clear relationship between ideas. For example, “Although table tennis…” is not completed with a contrasting main clause. Grouping the most stable/high series together and the rising or falling series together, while using simpler, more precise transitions, would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “popular,” “gradually,” and “fluctuate,” and the reader can generally understand which activities you mean. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the description difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “all time most popular,” “it had grew consequently,” and “does down at the most” do not express the intended trends naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “diffrent,” “Amatuer,” “participanat,” and “performences.” Aim for precise trend language and check spelling carefully; for example, use “remained the most popular,” “rose steadily,” and “declined sharply.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “While,” “However,” and “Although,” and the main meaning is often recoverable. However, complex structures are frequently faulty, and errors in verb forms, tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “it had grew,” “it was become,” and “it had concurrently droping”; these should use forms such as “it grew,” “it became,” and “it declined.” In “Film club was all time most popular,” the article and sentence structure also need attention. Practise describing past data with consistent past simple forms, and check that each linking clause is attached to a complete sentence.

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