Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph depicts the variation of activities and participants concentration from 2000 to 2020 with an interval of 5 years in one social centre in Melbourne, Australia.

Overall, the graph showing film club has catched the massive number of people over the years. In contrast, number of participants in other activities like Martial arts, Amateur dramaticts, Table tennis and musical performances are below 50% in all over the years. However, the only activity which is Musical performance had no participants before 2005.

This graph gives an idea of people's interest on various activities. For example, people's interest were constant for film club as the participants number were more than 60% from 2000 to 2020. Although, the line of Table tennis on the graph showing that participants curiosity was remained same till 2010 but a gradual upgrade has been noticed after 2010 and it reached at more than 50%. On the other hand, the participants number was gradually decreased for Amateur dramatics after 2005 and it became less than 10% in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall contrast: film club participation stays high, while amateur dramatics declines and table tennis rises sharply. You also report the absence of musical performances at the beginning and give some relevant comparisons, such as table tennis exceeding 50 by 2020 and amateur dramatics falling below 10. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: the other activities are not all below 50 throughout, since table tennis reaches about 54 in 2020. The claim that film club “catched the massive number” is also imprecise, and the response omits useful details about martial arts and the later growth of musical performances. To strengthen the report, select the most important changes and support them with accurate figures and clearer comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to details, and the main trends can generally be followed. Linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “Although,” and “On the other hand” show an effort to connect comparisons. However, some links are not used accurately or smoothly: “Although” begins a sentence that does not complete the contrast, while “However” introduces a point that is not clearly opposed to the preceding statement. The final paragraph also shifts into general claims about people’s interests rather than consistently reporting the graph. Organise the body around the key trends, and use linking words only where the relationship between the ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic-related vocabulary, including “participants,” “gradual,” “constant,” and “decreased,” so the reader can understand the broad trends. There are also attempts at more varied phrasing, such as “participants curiosity” and “people’s interest.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a graph: “catched the massive number,” “participants concentration,” and “interest on various activities” do not express the intended meanings clearly. “Below 50%” is also unsuitable because the graph shows participant numbers, not percentages. Spelling errors such as “dramaticts” further reduce accuracy. Prefer precise reporting language such as “the number of participants remained stable” and “rose sharply,” and check collocations and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a comparison with “Although” and a relative clause beginning “which is Musical performance.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the graph showing film club has catched” has an incorrect verb form and an incomplete clause structure; “people’s interest were” has subject–verb disagreement; and “participants curiosity was remained same” combines an incorrect possessive pattern with an unnecessary passive form. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “the participants number” and “Although, the line…” Practise forming complete clauses and checking agreement, verb forms, and articles. More accurate control of these structures would make your comparisons easier to follow.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.