Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The illustration shows that the number of particpants in different activities increase or decrease by 2000 to 2020 It is quit evident from the chart that the number of particpants in the different activities increase or decreases or there is slightly changes between themin these years the musical performance increase over the year between these years the number of particpants in the table tennis rapidly grown between the 2010 t0 2020 while on the other hand the number of particpant in amateur dramatics slightly decreases the number of particpants it shows that the interst of the particpant change from amateur dramatics to the table tennis table tennis is more famous in the young generation while amateur is very famous in the old people in the martial arts remain almost the same between 2000 to 2020 the number in the film club also remain the same between these years there is slightly decrease in the 2010 but later it increases

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant patterns, including the sharp rise in table-tennis participation, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the relative stability of martial arts and the film club. These observations show an attempt to summarise the graph rather than list every figure. However, the overview is unclear and repetitive: the opening says activities “increase or decrease,” without highlighting the main contrasts. Some details are inaccurate or unsupported: the film club rises slightly overall, from about 64 to 66, rather than simply remaining the same, and the claim that table tennis is popular with young people while amateur dramatics is popular with older people is not shown by the graph. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response includes relevant information and uses basic linking expressions such as “while on the other hand” and “but later,” so the reader can sometimes follow the comparisons. However, ideas are not arranged into clear stages or paragraphs, and the opening and following sentence repeat almost the same general point. The long sequence beginning “in these years the musical performance increase” joins several trends without clear boundaries, making it difficult to see which information belongs together. Some references, such as “it shows,” are also unclear. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and grouped details, using full stops and a small number of accurate connectors to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “rapidly grown,” “decreases,” and “remain almost the same,” which helps convey changes over time. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “number of participants” and “between these years.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “particpants,” “quit evident,” “interst,” and “famous,” which can make the intended meaning less clear or sound unsuitable for describing graph data. Choose precise trend language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a line as rising, falling, fluctuating, or remaining stable, and use “participation” or “participant numbers” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and there is little evidence of consistently controlled sentence forms. Verb agreement and tense are frequent problems: “the number … increase or decreases” and “the number … rapidly grown” do not fit their subjects or the time period. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “the musical performance” and “the number of particpant.” The extended sentence lacks reliable punctuation, so several ideas run together and become harder to understand. Use shorter, complete sentences first, with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and past-tense forms when describing changes from 2000 to 2020.

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