Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the line graph shows us the number of participants changing throughout the years in five diffrent activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, Film club remained the most popular activity throughout the whole 20 year period staying around 66, while table tennis shot up in popularity in the year 2010 reaching almost 55 participants, musical performance had zero participants from 2000 to 2005 but also became more popular in the year 2010, Martical arts fluctuated slightly between thirty-eight and thirty-two ending at thirty-six,However Amateur dramatics had a steady deacrse from 2005 to 2020 ending at around 5 participants.

in contrast table tennis had increased from 16 all the way up to 54 from 2000 to 2020 becomng the second most popular activity, meanwhile Amateur dramatics fell steady from 26 to just 6, finally musical performance started with zero participants but gradually increased to 18 by 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall patterns: the film club remains the most popular, table tennis rises substantially, and amateur dramatics declines. You also include relevant figures, such as table tennis increasing from 16 to 54 and amateur dramatics falling from 26 to 6. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: table tennis reaches almost 55 in 2020, not in 2010, and the film club stays around 60–66 rather than “staying around 66.” The overview also says musical performances became more popular in 2010, but does not clearly describe their continued rise to 18. Martial arts is covered, though briefly. More precise comparisons and a clearer account of the main changes across the period would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, an overview and a paragraph giving further comparisons. The information is generally grouped by activity, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “in contrast” and “meanwhile” help show relationships between trends. However, the overview combines several activities in one long sentence, making the comparisons difficult to follow. The final paragraph repeats some points already made, particularly the rise in table tennis and fall in amateur dramatics, rather than adding a clearly organised set of details. Punctuation also weakens the flow, especially the comma splice in “ending at thirty-six,However.” Use separate sentences and organise the details into clearer comparisons to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “fluctuated,” “shot up in popularity,” “gradually increased” and “fell.” These choices make the main movements understandable, and you attempt some variation rather than relying only on “increased” and “decreased.” However, several spelling errors—“diffrent,” “Martical,” “deacrse” and “becomng”—reduce accuracy. Some expressions are also imprecise or awkward: “staying around 66” does not capture the film club’s small fluctuations, while “shot up … in the year 2010” misrepresents the timing of table tennis’s sharp rise. Prefer precise trend language and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while,” “but” and “meanwhile,” and the overall meaning is usually clear. Some grammatical and punctuation errors remain. The opening phrase “shows us the number” is less suitable for an academic summary, and “from the period 2000 to 2020” has an awkward grammatical construction. In the overview, several clauses are joined into one sentence without appropriate punctuation, and “ending at thirty-six,However” needs a full stop or a correctly placed conjunction. The phrase “table tennis had increased” also uses a past perfect form without a clear earlier reference point. Build shorter, controlled sentences and check tense consistency and sentence boundaries.

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