Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates that the information about the number of participants from five diiferent activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in the years between 2000 and 2020.

In 2000, nearly 65 people took part in film club and the number dropped slightly to 60 in 2010 but it rose to 66 in the following years. Furthermore, in martial arts more than 35 people took participation in 2000 and the figure fluctuated until the end of the period.

Moreover, 26 people were interested to take part in amateur dramatics and it remained almost the same after five years but after 2005 the number decreased dramatically to 7 in the following years. Meanwhile, in table tennis 16 individuals were interested in participating and it inclined slightly to 20 in 2005 and remained constant until 2010 but surprisingly, the figure inclined considerably to 55 in 2020 respectively. Nevertheless, nobody was interested to participate in musical performances until 2005 but the number rose significantally to 18 in 2020 respectively.

Overall, film club was the most popular choice among individuals but it showed slightly improvement in the given period. In contrast, musical performances were the least popular choice as nobody took participation in the beginning but the figure increased sharply in the following years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all five activities and identify several important patterns: film club remains the leading activity, table tennis rises strongly, and amateur dramatics declines. Most figures are close to the chart, including the film-club peak of about 66 and table tennis reaching roughly 55. However, some trends are reported imprecisely: amateur dramatics falls to about 6 by 2020, rather than “7 in the following years,” and musical performances rise from 12 in 2010 to 18 in 2020, so the increase did not begin only after 2005. The overview also calls musical performances the least popular throughout, although amateur dramatics is lower by 2020. To strengthen the response, make the overview reflect the changing rankings and describe each series across the full period more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, paragraphs describing the activities, and a concluding overview. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “Meanwhile” help signal movement between series, and the reader can follow the main comparisons. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some features of stronger progression. However, several transitions feel mechanical, and “respectively” is used where no paired comparison is being made. The overview comes after detailed reporting but partly repeats earlier points rather than synthesising the main changes. Grouping the activities by trend—for example, stable or fluctuating figures versus sharp rises and falls—and using fewer, more purposeful connectors would make the progression smoother and cohesion less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “fluctuated,” “decreased dramatically,” “remained constant,” and “inclined considerably.” These choices communicate the broad movements, and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural collocations: people “took participation” and were “interested to take part,” while figures are more naturally said to “rise” than “incline.” “Significantally” is misspelled, and “respectively” is repeatedly added without a corresponding list. These issues fit a response that attempts some less common vocabulary but does not always control it accurately. Prefer standard chart language such as “the number of participants,” “participated in,” and “increased substantially,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “but,” “while,” and “until,” and the main trends remain understandable. Some sentences also handle time references clearly, such as the description of table tennis remaining stable before rising. There are some grammatical errors, though they rarely prevent communication. For example, the opening sentence has an awkward structure (“illustrates that the information about”), and “the number dropped … but it rose to 66 in the following years” uses an unclear time reference. In “it showed slightly improvement,” the modifier is not formed correctly; this is a grammatical word-form issue. Aim for direct sentence patterns, consistent past-tense reporting, and clearer time phrases, while retaining your varied sentence structures.

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