Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph provides information about the amount of people who takes part in various activities at a social centre of Melbourne in Australia between a period of 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club attains the maximum number of participants during the whole period, same trend is shown by the tablee tennis which dramatically increased after been stable, while the amateur dramatics remains the lowest throughout the time line. The martial arts fluctuated till the end.

To begin with, film club has 65 number of participants in 2000 and affter a slight decrease reached a dip at 60 in 2010 and afterwhich, it gain its peak of 65 again in 2020. The musical performances hs no participations till 2005 and after that it escalated slightly to 2010 and maximum in 2020 with 19 people who participated. While the martial arts starts at 40 after which it fluctuated till 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant overall patterns: the film club remains the largest activity, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: amateur dramatics is not the lowest throughout, since musical performances has no participants initially and remains below it until later. Some figures are also overstated, such as film club at 65 rather than about 64 in 2000, and martial arts at 40 rather than about 36. Most importantly, the response ends before describing the substantial rise in table tennis or the decline in amateur dramatics in detail, and the martial-arts sentence is unfinished. The response is also one word below the required minimum. Include a complete comparison of the main trends and finish each point with accurate data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and phrases such as “Overall” and “To begin with” help signal stages. However, progression is incomplete: the final paragraph moves among film club, musical performances and martial arts without a clear grouping, then stops mid-sentence. The overview also combines several trends in a long sentence, making the relationships between them less clear. Use separate, logically grouped detail paragraphs—for example, stable or fluctuating activities together, followed by the rising and falling series—and complete each comparison. This would make the organisation more coherent and the linking less abrupt.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “slight decrease,” “fluctuated,” “dramatically increased” and “escalated slightly.” These choices show an attempt to vary language rather than repeat “went up” or “went down.” However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “amount of people,” “attains the maximum number,” “gain its peak,” and “maximum in 2020.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “tablee,” “affter” and “hs,” which reduce the polish of the report. Choose standard chart-reporting collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe participant numbers as “the number of participants” and say a figure “reached a peak.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a time clause in “after a slight decrease reached a dip at 60 in 2010.” However, errors in agreement, tense and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some statements awkward or incomplete. For example, “people who takes part” should use a plural verb, while “the amateur dramatics remains” needs agreement with the intended subject. The phrase “after been stable” lacks the correct verb form, and “While the martial arts starts at 40 after which it fluctuated till 2020” is an unfinished sentence with inconsistent tense. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and keep past-tense reporting consistent throughout.

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