Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrate gives information on the numbers of participtants for various activities at one school social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants in the film club show the largest group .The table tennis show the dramatic increase while, the Amatuer dramatics decreased gradually.

According to the line graph in 2000 the highest number of participants was recorded at roughly 64,but saw a minor decline till 2010 , however the number gradually went up again and ended up at 68 participants in 2020. Martial arts showed the 2nd largest number at approximately 37 participants. it saw fluctuation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the film club as the largest activity and note the contrasting rise in table tennis and decline in amateur dramatics, which are important overall features. However, the report is incomplete: it stops during the martial-arts description and omits the later figures and trends for several activities, especially table tennis and musical performances. The film-club endpoint is also given as 68, whereas the graph shows about 66; the stated decline to 2010 and subsequent rise are otherwise broadly accurate. The response is 104 words, below the required 150, which contributes to the limited coverage. To develop the report, include a complete overview and compare the main changes across the full period, supporting them with selected accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. The overview also signals comparisons between activities. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph ends abruptly after “it saw fluctuation,” leaving the account unfinished and the activities unevenly covered. Some linking is awkward or inaccurate, as in “while, the Amateur dramatics decreased,” and the long sentence about the film club joins contrasting stages with “but” and “however” without clear punctuation. Use separate, logically grouped paragraphs for the overview and key trends, and connect comparisons with clear, correctly punctuated transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “minor decline,” “fluctuation,” and “dramatic increase,” and the reader can generally identify the activities being discussed. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice problems reduce precision: “participtants” and “Amatuer” are misspelled, while “school social center” changes the task’s description of a social centre. “The table tennis” is also an unnatural way to refer to the activity, and “ended up” is informal for an academic report. Aim for accurate activity labels and a wider set of neutral trend expressions, such as “rose steadily,” “fell sharply,” or “remained relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a sentence describing the film club’s decline and later recovery. However, errors in sentence structure and agreement are frequent enough to make parts of the report awkward. For example, “The graph illustrate gives” combines incompatible verb forms, and “the number of participants … show” has subject–verb disagreement. The opening uses the incorrect time pattern “between 2000 to 2020,” and punctuation is often missing or misplaced, as in “64,but” and “while, the.” The final fragment, “it saw fluctuation,” also leaves the idea incomplete. Build accuracy with clear subject–verb patterns and complete sentences, then check tense consistency and punctuation.

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