Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graph shows the information for different activities at one centre in Melbourne, Australia. Different people participate in these activities in 2000 to 2020. Overall, parcipants in Film club are about 64% in 2000 and this figure steadily increase to 67 numbers of participants in 2020. In Musical performances at the lowest point and have 0 participant in 2000 to 2005. After 2005 this number was significantly rose to 11 participants in 2010. In Table tennis the numbers of participants were and remaind stable till 2010 and then dramatically increased to 55 in given period. Participators in Amateur dramatics were 25 in 2000 and remain equall in 2005 and then quickly fall down in 2020. By contrast Participants in Martial arts was fluctuated during the period. Number of people who play Film club activity remains at the peak point in 2020 and Amateur dramatics shows the lowest figure. Table tennis activity has 20 participants in 2010 and then this number sharply reached to 55 in 2020.It was a significantly increase.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns, including the film club’s high participation, the sharp rise in table tennis, and the decline in amateur dramatics. Some figures are broadly accurate: table tennis rises from about 20 in 2010 to around 55 in 2020, while musical performances begin at zero and increase. However, the overview is unclear and repeats details rather than summarising the main contrasts. The film-club figure is a number of participants, not a percentage, and it rises only slightly from about 64 to 66. Amateur dramatics falls from about 26 to 6, rather than remaining equal in 2005. To make the report more complete, state the overall trends clearly and compare the series—for example, table tennis overtakes martial arts by 2015 and becomes the second-largest activity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains relevant information and uses a few linking expressions, such as “Overall,” “After 2005,” and “By contrast.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the overview is mixed with individual details, and the final sentences repeat the table-tennis increase and the film-club peak already mentioned. Several sentences are difficult to follow because information is joined without clear structure, as in “In Musical performances at the lowest point and have 0 participant…” A clearer organisation would use a brief introduction, an overview of the main trends, and then two focused detail paragraphs grouping related activities. Use comparisons to connect the data rather than listing each series in a loosely connected sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “stable,” “dramatically increased,” and “lowest figure,” showing an attempt to describe trends. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive. “64%” incorrectly presents participants as a percentage, while “67 numbers of participants” is not a natural expression. Phrases such as “quickly fall down,” “remained equall,” and “a significantly increase” also reduce precision; spelling errors such as “parcipants” and “remaind” are noticeable. Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and vary it selectively: for example, “the number of participants,” “declined steadily,” and “rose sharply.” Check spelling and word forms before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, and the reader can generally identify the activities and broad trends. However, errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “this figure steadily increase” needs subject–verb agreement, while “In Musical performances at the lowest point and have 0 participant” is not a complete grammatical sentence. The construction “this number was significantly rose” incorrectly combines passive “was” with a past-tense verb. There are also problems with plural forms and punctuation, including the run-on spacing before “It was a significantly increase.” Build reliable sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense consistency and agreement; use a few accurate complex sentences rather than joining several ideas loosely.

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