Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This graph illustrates the participants from Melbourne who took part in different activites at a social center in 2000 to 2020. There were different categories like film club, martial arts, amature dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.

There was a sharp declined in amature dramatics after 2005 and sudden inclined in table tennis after 2010. Martial arts and film club participants showed stability. Martial arts particiapnts are on top of list.

Film club paticipants remained loyal from 2000 to 2020 ranging from 60 to 70 in every year. Martial arts participants were between 30 to 40 in every year. Musical performances participants were nothing till 2005 but after it there were 10 to 20 paticipants each year.

Amature dramatics participants were 20 to 30 till 2005 but after that they numbers are declined each year. Table tennis particiapnts showed interest after 2010 and there number increased in every year till 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main activities and report several relevant patterns, including the decline in amateur dramatics and the rise in table tennis. You also note that film-club participation stayed high and that musical performances began later. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: martial arts was not the top activity; the film club had the most participants throughout, while table tennis rose to second place by 2020. The claim that martial arts and film club were both stable also overlooks the substantial growth in table tennis and the fall in amateur dramatics. Your account gives broad ranges rather than selecting key figures to support these trends, and the overview could more clearly compare the strongest increases and decreases. This is relevant coverage, but some features are less fully and precisely reported than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a generally understandable order: it introduces the chart, gives a brief overview, and then describes several activities. This helps the reader follow the main points. However, the organisation is not fully effective because the overview includes the inaccurate statement that martial arts participants are “on top of list,” and the later paragraphs do not consistently group or compare related trends. Several sentences repeat “participants” and begin with activity labels, creating a list-like progression rather than a connected summary. Linking phrases such as “while,” “by contrast,” and “whereas” could make comparisons clearer. Use a distinct overview that highlights the leading activity, the sharpest rise, and the main decline, then organise the details around those patterns.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participants,” “ranging from,” “declined,” and “increased,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision. “Sudden inclined” is not a natural way to describe a rise, and “showed interest” describes people’s attitudes rather than the number of participants. There are also repeated misspellings, including “activites,” “amature,” and “paticipants,” alongside the informal phrase “on top of list.” Aim for accurate trend language and vary it appropriately—for example, “rose sharply,” “fell steadily,” and “remained relatively stable.” These changes would make the report more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You communicate the main ideas using mostly simple sentences, and some sentence patterns are understandable, such as “Table tennis participants showed interest after 2010 and there number increased in every year till 2020.” However, grammatical control is uneven. The opening phrase “in 2000 to 2020” uses an incorrect time construction, and “There was a sharp declined” has an incorrect noun form after the article. In “after that they numbers are declined,” the pronoun, possessive, and verb construction are faulty. The response also relies heavily on short, similarly structured statements, with limited use of accurate complex sentences. Practise past-tense reporting and sentence patterns with “while” or “whereas” to compare trends, checking agreement and verb forms carefully.

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