Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants of different activities between 2000 and 2020.

Overall the film club visitors had more in number rather than the other activities but Amateur dramatics had fewer people.

As can be seen in line graph, the film club goers were increased in 2000 and after 2000 it decreased slightly till 2010 and reaches 65 participants. After that in 2010 it increased smoothly for neext 5 years. From 2015 to 2020 it increased again and just over to 67 members. Furthermore, material arts decreased in starting till 2010. After 2010 it started raising and increased slowely.

However, the table tennis activity

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the period and activities, and your overview correctly notes that the film club had the highest participation while amateur dramatics declined. However, the report is incomplete: it stops just as you begin discussing table tennis, leaving that major rise and musical performances largely unreported. Some film-club details are also inaccurate: participation was already high in 2000 and dipped slightly to 2010, rather than increasing in 2000; it then rose to about 66 by 2020. The martial-arts description misses its fluctuations. The response is 107 words, below the required 150, which contributes to the limited coverage. To improve, include a complete overview and compare the main trends across all five activities using accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing some trends. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “However” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is weak because the response ends with the unfinished statement “However, the table tennis activity,” and the activities are not covered in a balanced or clearly planned order. Some time references are confusing, particularly “in 2000 and after 2000” followed by “After that in 2010.” Organise the report into a concise overview and one or two body paragraphs grouping related trends, then use clear time markers to guide the reader through each change.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “decreased slightly,” “increased,” and “participants.” The meaning is generally recoverable, but the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural. For example, “film club visitors” and “film club goers” are less suitable than “participants” or “members,” while “material arts” appears to mean “martial arts.” “Increased smoothly” and “increased slowely” are awkward descriptions, and “more in number rather than” is not idiomatic. Spelling errors such as “neext” and “slowely” also reduce accuracy. Build a small set of precise trend phrases and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, and the main ideas can usually be understood. However, control is inconsistent, especially when describing changes over time. In “the film club goers were increased,” the passive form is incorrect; use “the number of film-club participants increased.” The sentence “After that in 2010 it increased smoothly for neext 5 years” has an unclear time sequence and needs a clearer clause structure. There are also article and comparison problems in “had more in number rather than the other activities.” Use accurate past-tense forms consistently, and check that each sentence has a clear subject and a logical time reference. More reliable sentence patterns would improve clarity.

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