Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrates the information of the number of paricipants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, there were five different activities, like fan club, martial arts, amateur dramatic, Table tennis and Musical performances at social centre in melbourne. Moreover, all shows some number of participations in 2000 except musical performance which remaind zero until 2005.

Furthermore, the number of participations of film club and martial arts decreased in the period of 200 to 2005 but on the same period the figures of amature dramtic and table tennis increased around five percent. After this period, participations of martial arts fluctiate between thirty to fourty numbers. However the figures of table tennis after 2010, increased significantly from 20 to above 50.

Regarding the musical perfomances, it has also increased constanly and reached on around 20 in 2020 but the number of amature dramtic decreased contantly and went below to 10. Moreover the numbers of film club, barely increased 3 to 5 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the five activities and report several important trends, including the sharp rise in table tennis, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the gradual growth in musical performances. However, the overview is not sufficiently precise: saying that all activities had participants in 2000 overlooks that musical performances began at zero, and the statement that it remained zero “until 2005” is inaccurate because it first rises by 2010. Some comparisons are also unclear or incorrect: film club and martial arts fell from 2000 to 2005, but amateur dramatics rose by only about two participants, not around five percent. Include a clearer overview of the contrasting overall patterns and support it with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the activities, and paragraph breaks help separate these functions. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “However,” and “Regarding” show an effort to connect ideas. At times, though, the progression feels mechanical, and some references are unclear. For example, “After this period” does not specify which period, while “on the same period” makes the comparison between the 2000 and 2005 figures awkward. The overview also mixes the list of activities with a trend statement. Grouping the series by their main patterns—rising, falling, or fluctuating—and using clearer time references would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “decreased,” “increased significantly,” “fluctuate,” and “reached,” so the main trends are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision. “Participations” is not the natural term for the number of people; use “participants” or “participation numbers.” “Fan club” misnames the film club, and “amature dramtic” is both misspelled and an inaccurate label for amateur dramatics. Expressions such as “increased around five percent” also confuse percentage change with a change in participant numbers. Use the chart’s exact activity names and practise precise language for describing quantities and trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “but,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms, agreement, articles, and prepositions. For example, “all shows some number” needs a plural subject and a more suitable verb, while “it has also increased” shifts tense in a report about past data. The phrase “reached on around 20” uses an unnecessary preposition, and “went below to 10” has an incorrect construction. There are also awkward sentence patterns in “the number … decreased … but on the same period.” Review past-tense consistency and practise accurate comparative sentence structures.

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