Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line chart illustrates the information of participants of various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. The given activities such as film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.
Overall, the film club had the highest numbers from 2000 to 2020. In 2000, there was no one to participate in musical performance, it gradually start in 2005. The table tennis had few number of participants steadily increased by 2010, and then the numbers were increased rapidly at the end of 2020.
The line chart shows the number of participants in various activities. In 2000, the highest participants were in film club which accounted for 63. There were no participants in musical performances. While other activities such as martial arts, amateur dramatics and table tennis participants were 38, 28 and 18, respectively. While film club participants were steadily increased from 62 to 70. Similarly, martial arts had 38 participants by 2000, some fluctuation in following years while number of participant remained same by 2020. However, amateur dramatic participants were gradually decreased after 2010, only 5 members were remained by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You identify the main overall pattern that the film club remained the most popular activity, and you note the sharp late rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. These are relevant features, and most of the figures you give for 2000 are close to the chart. However, the overview contains a factual error: musical performances began in 2010, not 2005. There are also important omissions: the response does not report the growth in musical performances after 2010, and the table-tennis rise is not supported with its key figures. Some details are inaccurate, including film club reaching 70 (it ends at about 66) and martial arts remaining unchanged (it fluctuates and ends near its starting level). Covering these trends accurately and more fully would strengthen the report.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and the reader can follow the broad topic. However, progression is uneven: the final paragraph repeats information already given in the overview, while the musical-performances trend and the table-tennis figures are not developed. Several sentences begin with “While,” including a sentence fragment (“While other activities…”), and “Similarly” does not clearly signal the relationship between the film-club and martial-arts data. The overview also moves abruptly from film club to musical performances and then table tennis. Grouping the rising, falling and relatively stable activities, and using clearer links between comparisons, would make the organisation more coherent.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “participants,” “fluctuation,” “gradually decreased” and “accounted for,” so the topic is generally clear. However, some word combinations and forms are awkward or repetitive, including “information of participants,” “highest participants” and “few number of participants.” “The numbers were increased rapidly” is also an unnatural way to describe a trend. Repeated use of “participants” and “numbers” limits precision, while “amateur dramatic participants” is not the correct form for the activity. Aim for accurate collocations and a wider set of trend verbs, such as “rose,” “declined,” “remained stable” and “peaked,” while keeping the activity names consistent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including “which accounted for 63” and “while the number of participants remained…,” but control is inconsistent. The opening list is a sentence fragment: “The given activities such as…” The construction “it gradually start in 2005” has an incorrect verb form, and “film club participants were steadily increased” uses an incorrect passive structure. There are also agreement and article problems in “few number,” “number of participant,” and “amateur dramatic participants were gradually decreased.” Some sentences remain understandable, but these errors make several descriptions less clear. Practise complete sentence structures and use active trend verbs with accurate tense and agreement, for example, “Table-tennis participation rose sharply.”
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