Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the graph demonstrate the amount of people for distinct curriculum at single social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020

overall, film club have high number of participants from the beginning.Likewise,amature dramatics decline sharply at the end.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives two relevant overall observations: the film club has the highest participation, while amateur dramatics declines towards the end. However, it does not summarise the main changes across the five activities or support these observations with figures and comparisons. For example, it omits the sharp rise in table tennis and the later introduction and growth of musical performances, both important features. The statement that amateur dramatics declines “at the end” is broadly accurate, but the fall begins earlier and continues throughout most of the period. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words. To improve, provide a clear overview and describe the key trends with selected data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the graph, followed by a separate overview beginning with “overall.” This gives the reader a simple progression from context to general observations. However, the response is too brief to develop a coherent summary, and the two observations are not connected to supporting details or comparisons. The linking word “Likewise” is not quite suitable because the decline in amateur dramatics contrasts with the film club’s consistently high figures rather than illustrating a similar trend. The paragraphing is minimal but recognisable. A fuller response should group related trends, use clear transitions such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile,” and sequence details by activity or by notable change.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “participants,” “decline sharply,” and “social center,” so the general topic is understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing this chart: “amount of people” is less suitable than “number of participants,” and “distinct curriculum” does not describe leisure activities. “Amature” is also misspelled, and “at the end” is vague when describing a trend over a twenty-year period. The limited vocabulary makes it difficult to report comparisons or changes precisely. Use chart-specific terms such as “activity,” “figure,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “fell,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates its basic meaning through short, simple sentence structures, including an introductory statement and an overview. However, grammatical control is weakened by subject–verb agreement: “the graph demonstrate” should be “the graph demonstrates,” and “film club have” should be “the film club has.” The opening also needs articles and more natural sentence construction, for example, “at a social centre” rather than “at single social center.” Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around “Likewise,amature.” There is little variety in sentence forms, so the response does not demonstrate a broader grammatical range. Practise accurate present-tense descriptions and build longer sentences that compare two activities while maintaining correct agreement and punctuation.

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