Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compares the number of individuals take part in different social activities from 2000 to 2020 in the country of Melbourne and Australia.

Overall,the number of people participating in film clubs is high throughout the period.Number of Martial artist fluctuated and there was a decline in Amateur dramatics after 2005.Other activities were rising gradually.However,the number of tennis player increased by 2010 with a great number

In 2000 there were around 65 actors who took part in fim club but the number was decreased in 2000 to 60 but in 2020 it became steady.There were only 28 members in dramatics in 2000 but there was a sharp decline after 2005 and at the end the result was only 5 .participants.Moreover,Musicians were very low in contrast to other activities. But,there was a rise in number of tennis players in 2010 and by the 2020 the number was 50 .Martial artist were st

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main categories and some important patterns: film-club participation remains high, amateur dramatics declines, and table tennis rises substantially. However, the overview is incomplete and partly unclear. “Other activities were rising gradually” does not accurately describe martial arts, which fluctuates around the mid-30s, or amateur dramatics, which falls. Several figures and descriptions are also inaccurate: film-club numbers fall to about 60 in 2010 before recovering, rather than decreasing “in 2000 to 60” and then becoming steady; table tennis reaches about 54 in 2020, not 50. The account of martial arts is cut off, and musical performances are not described with figures. Select the clearest overall trends and report them accurately with key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic structure, with an introductory sentence, an overview, and a paragraph of details, so the reader can recognise an attempt to organise the report. However, progression is difficult to follow because several trends are crowded together and some links are unclear. For example, “However,the number of tennis player increased by 2010 with a great number” is an incomplete, confusing point, and the final sentence stops at “Martial artist were st”. Connect each activity’s figures to its trend in a clear sequence, and use separate paragraphs for the overview and selected details. Check punctuation around linking words: “Overall,” and “Moreover,” need spaces and should not be followed by an unnecessary comma after “But.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “fluctuated,” “decline,” “sharp decline,” and “rise,” which helps communicate changes in the graph. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. “Actors” does not describe people in a film club, while “Martial artist” and “Musicians” are not suitable labels for participant numbers in these activities. “The country of Melbourne and Australia” is also an inaccurate way to identify the location. Spelling errors such as “fim” and “dramatics” further reduce precision. Use the activity names as labels—such as “film-club participants” and “people attending musical performances”—and choose verbs that describe the data precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer structures, such as “there was a sharp decline after 2005,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and errors are frequent enough to make some statements difficult to interpret. The opening has a missing verb pattern in “individuals take part,” and “the number of people participating in film clubs is high” shifts awkwardly from the past data to the present. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and agreement in phrases such as “number of Martial artist” and “the number of tennis player.” The final clause, “Martial artist were st,” is incomplete. Practise complete past-tense sentences, consistent plural forms, and accurate subject–verb agreement; then proofread each sentence for a clear ending.

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