Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrate the number of participants for multiple activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the table tennis individuals had increased almost triple from 2010 to 2020, and Amateur dramatics had decreased steadily from 2005 to 2020.

From 2000 to 2020 the film club and martial arts participants remains almost consistent, the major changed has been seen in the table tennis participants from the year 2010 to 2020 they had risen to almost triple in their numbers from 15 to almost 55.

In 2005 the musical performances is almost zero which is steadily grow and reached to almost 20 in the year 2020, Furthermore, the decline has been seen in the amateur dramtics participants from the year 2000 to 2020. In addition to that to the martial arts participants in the year 2000 is almost 35 which remians consistent in next two decades till the 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important patterns, especially the sharp rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics, and your overview gives the reader a general sense of change. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: table tennis rose from about 16 in 2000 (or 20 in 2005), not 15 in 2010, and amateur dramatics did not decline steadily from 2005 because it first rose slightly before falling. The film club also increased slightly overall, rather than simply remaining consistent. Musical performances began at zero in 2000, not 2005. The response is 146 words, below the required 150, and the short length contributes to limited coverage of the data and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and further details, and it groups some related trends together. However, progression is not consistently clear: the third paragraph repeats the table-tennis trend already mentioned in the overview, while the final paragraph moves between musical performances, amateur dramatics and martial arts without a clear organising principle. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “In addition to that” are used, but they do not always make the relationship between ideas clearer. Organise the body by contrasting rising and falling activities, or describe each series in a planned sequence, and avoid repeating the same point. This would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increased,” “decreased,” “risen” and “decline,” so the main changes are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and some word combinations are unnatural, such as “table tennis individuals” and “the major changed has been seen.” There are also spelling errors, including “dramtics” and “remians,” which reduce accuracy. Use the activity names as the subjects—for example, “participation in table tennis”—and choose precise trend language such as “rose sharply” or “remained relatively stable.” More accurate collocations and spelling would make the description clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. For example, “The line graph illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “participants remains” should use a plural verb form consistent with the past-time description. The sentence beginning “From 2000 to 2020…” also becomes difficult to control when several ideas are joined together. Articles and tense choices are inconsistent in phrases such as “the musical performances is almost zero.” Use past tense consistently for the historical data, check singular and plural subjects, and divide long sentences into shorter, complete statements. This will improve accuracy and readability.

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