Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities at a social center in Melbourne,Australia over the decade from 2000 to 2020.
Overall,participants of table tennis increased sharply where as Amateur dramatics dropped fastly and there was a fluctuation in the participants of martial arts.
Firstly,table tennis participants rose sharply fropm year 2000 to 2020 then there was a fluctuation in the candidates of martial arts.however,Amateurs dramatics dropped considerably.
Film club participants showed fluctuations from 2000 to 2020.Musical performance slightly increased in year 2005 and levelled off in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify several relevant overall patterns: table tennis rises, amateur dramatics declines, and martial arts fluctuates. However, the report is only partial and the main trends are not supported with figures or clear comparisons. For example, table tennis climbs from about 16 participants to 54, while amateur dramatics falls from roughly 26 to 6; including these endpoints would make the overview more informative. The statement that film club “showed fluctuations” is imprecise, as its numbers remain broadly stable, around 60–66. Musical performances did not increase in 2005; they stayed at zero until 2010, then rose gradually. The response also falls short of the required 150 words, leaving important features underdeveloped. Add accurate data and describe the key changes across the period.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, an overview, and a short paragraph describing individual activities. This gives the reader some organisation, and words such as “Overall” and “Firstly” signal the purpose of sections. However, progression is limited because the body largely repeats the overview rather than developing comparisons, and the final sentence introduces film club and musical performances without a clear grouping or transition. The long body sentence also joins several trends with a full stop missing after “arts,” making the relationships harder to follow. Use separate, logically grouped paragraphs—for example, rising activities and declining or stable ones—and connect comparisons explicitly with phrases such as “by contrast” and “while.”
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “participants,” “increased,” “dropped,” “fluctuation,” and “levelled off,” so the reader can understand the general trends. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “dropped fastly” is not idiomatic, “candidates” does not suit people taking part in activities, and “Musical performance” should refer to the activity as “musical performances.” “Showed fluctuations” also overstates the small changes in film-club numbers. Spelling errors such as “fropm” and inconsistent forms such as “Amateurs dramatics” reduce precision. Aim for accurate trend language and vary it with expressions such as “rose steadily,” “declined markedly,” and “remained relatively stable.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response uses mostly simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to combine ideas, but control is uneven. In “Overall, participants of table tennis increased sharply where as Amateur dramatics dropped fastly,” the clauses are joined without suitable punctuation, and the sentence structure is awkward. The body sentence beginning “Firstly” runs several statements together, while “there was a fluctuation in the participants of martial arts” shows an attempt at a more complex construction but is not integrated clearly with the following clause. Capitalisation and spacing around punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise writing complete, clearly separated sentences and use a controlled range of structures, such as “While table-tennis participation rose sharply, amateur dramatics declined.”
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