Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the data of people who participated in the activities held on a social centre that is collected from Melbourne and Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the participants of film club had maximum number and number of martial arts remained constant. Participants of table tennis remained constant during half survey then elevated the number dramatically. Amateur dramatics showed decline after 2010 while musical performences started from 2005 and kept on increasing the participant's count gradually.

In start of the survey, at around 60 people participated in Film club and this number was constant during the survey. The activity of Martial arts was almost constant, and kept the number around 40.

Participants for Table tennis was less untill 2010 but then significantly increased upto the level of 50 in 2020. Amateur's participants were 30 from 2000 to 2005 then decreased to less than 10 at the end of survey. People started participation in musical performances from 2005 and gradually increased untill 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns and provide a clear overview: film club is the largest activity, table tennis rises markedly, and amateur dramatics declines. Several comparisons are relevant, and the approximate figures for table tennis and amateur dramatics are broadly consistent with the graph. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Film club does not remain constant: it dips slightly before rising to about 66. Martial arts fluctuates around the mid-30s rather than staying around 40, and musical performances begin in 2010, not 2005. The overview also says table tennis is constant for half the period, although it rises from about 16 to 20 before its sharper increase. More precise reporting of these changes would make the account more complete and accurate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the activities. This gives the reader a sensible route through the information, and contrasts such as the rise in table tennis against the fall in amateur dramatics are easy to follow. However, the grouping of details could be more deliberate, and some links between statements are abrupt. For example, the final paragraph moves from table tennis to amateur dramatics and then musical performances without a clear comparison or transition. Phrases such as “In start of the survey” also make the progression less natural. Organise the body around related trends and use accurate, varied linking expressions to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “increased,” “decreased,” “decline,” and “gradually,” so the main information is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “significantly increased.” However, the range is limited and some word combinations are unnatural or imprecise: “the data of people,” “kept the number,” and “elevated the number” do not express the trends naturally. There are also spelling errors, including “performences” and “untill,” and “Amateur’s participants” is an unsuitable phrase. Build a more accurate set of trend collocations, such as “the number of participants rose,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the overview sentence beginning “while musical performances…” and the contrast introduced by “but then.” The meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “activities held on a social centre” has an incorrect preposition, while “Participants for Table tennis was” has subject–verb disagreement. Articles and sentence patterns are also problematic in “In start of the survey,” and the opening sentence is difficult to control because of its clause structure. Use straightforward, accurate patterns such as “At the start of the period, about 64 people attended the film club,” then add complex clauses only when you can maintain correct agreement and sentence structure.

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