Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

This graph depicts the amount of people who participated in different types of activities at a Social Centre from Year 2000 to 2020 in the city of Australia called Melbourne. Overall, there is a upward trend in number of participants in table tennis.

First, In the activity of film Club the number of people remained same between 60 to 70 throughout the given timeline. However, the number of people who attend the table tennis activity jumps from 20 to more than 50 after the year of 2010 onwards. Although, Amateur dramatics seen a dramatic decline in number of participants after year 2005 drop from 30 to 5 people in 2020.

Secondly, Musical Performances activity rose from none to 15 people from 2005 to 2020 respectively. Moreover, people in the activity of Martial Arts remained almost same in the whole given timeline. In addition there is a major difference between the attendance of people in Film Club and Musical Performances of almost 45 people in year 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the upward trend in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. You also included relevant comparisons, such as the difference in attendance between film club and musical performances. However, the overview is somewhat limited; it only mentions one activity, whereas a stronger response would provide a broader summary of the overall trends across all categories. Additionally, some data points are described with slight inaccuracies, such as stating musical performances rose from 'none' when the graph shows a starting point in 2005. To improve, ensure your overview captures the most significant general trends across the entire dataset.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'First', 'However', 'Although', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, some of these transitions are used mechanically or slightly incorrectly, such as starting a sentence with 'Although' followed by a main clause without a subordinate clause. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that your paragraphing consistently groups related information together.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the trends, using terms like 'upward trend', 'dramatic decline', and 'throughout the given timeline'. There are some instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'amount of people' (should be 'number of people') and 'remained same' (should be 'remained the same'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over collocations and articles. To improve, focus on using more varied verbs for trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'stabilised', or 'surged', and pay closer attention to basic grammatical articles.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'there is a upward trend' (should be 'an'), 'Amateur dramatics seen' (should be 'saw'), and 'remained almost same' (should be 'remained almost the same'). Additionally, there are issues with punctuation and capitalization, such as 'First, In the activity'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and proofreading for minor punctuation errors.

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