Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph shows that in Australia, melbourne in one social centre number of participants for different activities from 2 decades.
Overall, there are 5 different types of participants like film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis or musical performances. And the table tennis shows steadily growth.
To begin with, in the year 2000 around 15 members join table tennis activity and for 1 decade they shows stable rises and after 2010 the graph shows gradual growth in additionally in 2020 the graph in peak. In contrast in 2000 there are around 25 participants join amateur dramatics and after the year 2005 the graph was drastically decrease and in 2010 table tennis and amateur dramatics these both group have same number of participants that around 20.
The musical performance activity start late in 2005 and in starting year there were no member join these club afterwards the graph shows stedily increase. The martial arts and The film club these both clubs shows similar stability. But in 2000 the film club had around 65 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends. Some data points are described inaccurately or are difficult to follow, such as the claim that the film club and martial arts show 'similar stability' when the graph shows a significant decline for the film club. The description of the musical performance starting in 2005 is accurate, but the overall analysis lacks the precision required for a higher band. To improve, ensure that all data points are clearly identified and that the overview highlights the most striking differences and trends across the entire period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and' or 'the graph shows'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing. For example, the shift from discussing table tennis to amateur dramatics lacks a smooth transition. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'conversely', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'stable rises' instead of 'steady increase' and 'in additionally' which is grammatically incorrect. The student relies on basic descriptors like 'shows' and 'join' repeatedly. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and occasional errors in collocation limit the score. To improve, focus on using more precise verbs and nouns related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined', or 'remained constant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the table tennis shows steadily growth'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'in 2020 the graph in peak'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage.
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