Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph compares the number of participants for different activities at one center in Melbourne, Australia between the period of 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is clear that film club had the most members over the years. While amateur dramatics began at minimal point and it followed a downward trend. Conversely, table tennis experienced sudden growth in the number of participants.

Looking at the line graph, film club began at high point which was approximately 63% in 2000 and in the year 2010 it fell by 3% and stood at 60%; however after that it slightly rose to 65% in the year 2020, which was the maximum proportion ever recorded in the graph. Musical performances started with a small number of participants while it followed an upward trend from 10% in 2010 to roughly 19% in 2020.

Amateur dramatics started at 36% in 2000, then it rose by 2% and accounted for 38%; however, it recorded a decline in the year 2010 which was 20%. After that, amateur dramatics had sudden growth in the number of participants rose by 32% in next years and climbed to 53%. Martial arts began at 36% in 2000 where it had fluctuation between the years and stood at 35%, respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points. You successfully identified the main trends for each activity, such as the film club's dominance and the growth of table tennis. However, the description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as stating amateur dramatics had a 'sudden growth' of 32% without clearly contextualizing the timeline or the specific figures. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons between categories are more explicit and that the data points are reported with greater accuracy to avoid minor misinterpretations of the graph's timeline.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'conversely', 'however', and 'after that' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the connection between the years and the percentages could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related information, which helps the reader follow the progression of the data. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'downward trend', 'upward trend', and 'proportion'. There are some instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'began at minimal point' and 'stood at 35%, respectively', which is not used correctly in this context. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. Focusing on more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive sentence structures will help improve your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'it followed a downward trend' (which is a fragment when preceded by 'while') and 'in next years'. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'at high point' instead of 'at a high point'. These errors are frequent but do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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