Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The Graph below reveals information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

It is clear that film clubs records higher than 60 in the year 2000, which eventually drops in 2005 a bit which is near to 60 and in the year 2010 It records the lowest which is 60 but it again grows to near to 65 agter 2015 and it remain consistent in 2020. The Martial art club accounts between 30 to 40 partcipants which drops in 2005 and gains again near to 35 in the year 2010, and in the year 2015 and 2020 it remains near to 35 only. Ammature drama holds participants between 20 to 30 and gained in the year 2005 almost 30 participants, after this it start falling, in the year 2010 it records near to 20, in 2015 near to 10 and in 2020 near to 5. Table tennis records near to 15 participants in the year 2000, after this it grows consistently, in the year 2005 and 2010 the participants were near to 20, in 2015 it was near to 40 and in 2020 participants were near to 50. Musical performances were near 0 in the year 2000 and 2005 after that is constantly grows in the year 2010 it was near to 10, in the year 2015 it was near to 15 and in the year 2020 it was near to 20.

In conclusion, the Film clubs witness the fluctuations but stills it dominates in the chart and ammature dramatics shows a clear decline in the number of participants compared to the year 2000 and 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for each activity. However, the report is overly descriptive, listing data points for each year rather than synthesising the information into clear, comparative trends. While you have included an overview, it is somewhat limited in its analysis of the overall relationships between the categories. To reach a higher band, focus more on grouping the activities by their performance (e.g., those that increased vs. those that declined) rather than providing a chronological list for every single category, which makes the report feel repetitive and mechanical.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the internal structure of the body paragraphs is repetitive. You rely heavily on a 'year-by-year' approach, which hinders the flow of the information. While you use some cohesive devices like 'In conclusion' and 'after this', the transitions between sentences are often mechanical. The progression of ideas is clear, but the lack of varied linking words makes the text feel like a list of facts rather than a cohesive report. Improving the use of referencing and varied cohesive devices would help the ideas flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive. You frequently use phrases like 'near to' and 'records', which limits the precision of your report. There are also minor spelling errors, such as 'agter' instead of 'after', 'ammature' instead of 'amateur', and 'partcipants'. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of verbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'stabilised', 'plummeted', or 'experienced a steady growth'. Using more varied vocabulary will help you demonstrate a higher level of lexical control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'film clubs records' should be 'film clubs recorded' (subject-verb agreement and tense consistency). There are also issues with article usage and prepositions, such as 'in the year 2000' being used repeatedly where 'in 2000' would suffice. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on maintaining consistent past tense when describing historical data and proofreading for subject-verb agreement.

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