Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line chart illustrates the participants on five activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia fr the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the participants for the flim club had shown a high interest and it had remained at the higher trend for 20 years. However for Musical performances and Table tennis there is an significant increase in the participants. In the year 2010 Table tennis and Amateur dramatics had been in a same level of 20 participants. Martial Arts had seen an fluctuating trend as it started from 38 from the year 2000 to ended up at 39 in the year 2020.

No one had passion for the Musical performances for the first 5 years, then from the year 2005 it rose up from 0 to 15 in the year 2020. Table tennis had raised slowly from 18 in the year 2000 to 20 in next 10 years. After that it surged rapidly and reached it peak of 53 in the year 2020. Amateur dramatics had a quiet start and reached from 26 to 28 in the first 5 years, however it plunged in the next 15 years and reached the lowest among all of 5 events.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all five activities and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the intersection of Table tennis and Amateur dramatics in 2010. However, the report could be improved by ensuring the data points are more precise; for instance, describing the start and end points of Martial Arts as '38' and '39' is accurate, but the overall analysis lacks a cohesive summary of the most significant changes. The description of the film club as having a 'high interest' is a good start, but ensure you always support such claims with specific figures from the graph to fully meet the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'However' and 'After that', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly abrupt. For example, the transition between the overview and the detailed body paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be more balanced to ensure that the information is grouped more logically, perhaps by grouping activities with similar trends rather than listing them individually.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuating trend', 'surged rapidly', and 'plunged'. These choices help convey the movement of the data effectively. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'participants on five activities' (should be 'in') and 'at the higher trend' (should be 'at a high level'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations related to data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'had been in a same level' (should be 'at the same level'), 'had raised slowly' (should be 'rose slowly'), and 'no one had passion' (which is slightly unnatural in this context). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors. While these errors are noticeable, they rarely impede the reader's understanding of the data. To reach a higher band, focus on consistent verb tense usage, particularly when describing past trends versus current states.

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