Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graphs illustrates the numbers of participants for five different activities from 2000 to 2020 and It took place in Melbourne, Australia.
Overall, table tennis went up significantly during the period. Also, film club was always highest, and amateur dramatics the lowest.
First, table tennis stood at 16 individual at the start. It then rose to over 50 participants by 2020. Musical performances also grew to under 19 participants.
On the other hand, film club stayed the same around 60 to 65. Moreover, martial arts remained stable at around 30 to 40. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics went down rapidly to 5. it stood at 25 participants at the beginning.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have identified some main features, such as the growth of table tennis and the decline of amateur dramatics, the analysis is underdeveloped. You have not provided sufficient detail or comparative data to fully satisfy the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, you must ensure you reach the word count by providing a more thorough breakdown of the data points and ensuring all trends are clearly described with accurate supporting figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical (e.g., 'First', 'On the other hand', 'Moreover'). The progression of ideas is logical, but the brevity of the response makes the overall flow feel disjointed. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that sentences within paragraphs are more smoothly connected to create a more cohesive narrative rather than a list of observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You rely on simple verbs like 'went up', 'grew', and 'stayed the same'. While these are accurate, they do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also some minor issues with word choice, such as '16 individual' (should be '16 individuals'). To improve, incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', or 'a significant increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'The line graphs illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'it stood at 25' (capitalisation error). Additionally, the phrasing '16 individual' lacks pluralisation. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent use of plural forms when discussing data.
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