Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The graph illustrates how many people took part in different activities in Melbourne and Australia at one social centre from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club and Martial arts fluctuated moderately. Amateur dramatics started with low number and even much lower in the end. Table tennis and Musical performances' number experience an upward trend, especially the number of table tennis surged dramatically.
In 2000, the number of participants was approximately 65, marking as the largest club in the beginning. Although it dropped by 5 in 2010, the number of participants increased back in 2020. As for the Martial arts, it stayed floating around 36 from 2000 to 2020. In terms of Musical performancees, there was no participants in this club for the period 2000 to 2005 before it saw an upward trend during 2005 to 2020, and ended with approximately 19 participants.Amateur dramatics strated at 26, and it grew slightly before fell dramatically, slumping to 8 in 2020. Table tennis kept stable from 2000 to 2010, but it went up considerably in the remaining decade.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
这篇回答清晰地概述了主要趋势，并选择了相关数据点来支持描述。你成功识别了关键特征，例如乒乓球活动的激增和业余戏剧活动的减少。然而，报告可以通过确保所有数据点的准确性来进一步提升；例如，对 2000 年 'largest club' 的描述略显模糊，因为它没有明确指出具体的活动名称。此外，请确保地理背景准确；题目提到的是墨尔本的一个中心，但你的引言错误地暗示该中心同时位于墨尔本和澳大利亚。总体而言，任务完成得很好，重点明确，涵盖了趋势和比较。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
这篇回答逻辑组织严密，包含清晰的引言、概述以及按活动分类的主体段落。使用 'Overall'、'In 2000'、'Although' 和 'In terms of' 等衔接词，有效地引导读者理解数据。不过，段落划分略显不平衡，大部分分析集中在第二段。为了达到更高的分数，请确保句与句之间的过渡更顺畅，并避免重复的句式。思路的发展总体清晰，但由于指代方面存在细微的机械性错误，部分句子显得有些脱节。
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
你展示了足以应对该任务的词汇量，使用了 'fluctuated'、'upward trend'、'surged dramatically' 和 'slumping' 等词汇。这些选择有效地传达了数据的变化。在用词和拼写上存在一些小错误，例如 'Musical performancees' 和 'strated'，虽然不影响理解，但限制了分数的提升。为了改进，请尝试结合更精确的搭配，并确保拼写一致。目前的词汇足以准确描述趋势，但缺乏高分段所需的复杂性和多样性。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
这篇回答使用了简单句和复杂句的组合。虽然许多句子表达清晰，但存在一些语法不准确之处，例如 'no participants in this club for the period'（应为 'there were no participants'）和 'marking as the largest club'（应为 'marking it as'）。主谓一致和冠词的使用偶尔不一致。尽管有这些错误，报告整体含义依然清晰。为了提高，请重点校对基础的主谓一致问题，并确保复杂句的构建更加精确。
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