Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graphs illustrates the numbers of participants for five different activities from 2000 to 2020 and It was in Melbourne, Australia.
Overall, film club remained the most popular throughout. Table tennis experienced the largest increase. While amateur had the biggest decrease.
First, table tennis stood at 16 individuals at the start. It then rose to over 50 participants by 2020. Meanwhile, musical performances started at 0 and went up steadily to 19 by 2020.
On the other hand, film club fluctuated slightly around 60 to 65. Moreover, martial arts also experienced fluctuations at around 30 to 40. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics went down rapidly to 5 by 2020. it stood at 25 participants at the beginning.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have identified the main features, such as the popularity of the film club and the trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics, the analysis is underdeveloped. You have provided some data points, but the lack of length prevents a full, detailed comparison of all activities. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and include more specific data comparisons across the entire period to fully address the prompt requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile', 'On the other hand', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical, and the paragraphing is slightly disjointed. The final paragraph contains a sentence that seems tacked on ('it stood at 25 participants at the beginning'), which disrupts the flow. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that supporting details are integrated smoothly rather than added as afterthoughts.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'rose', and 'went down rapidly'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as referring to 'amateur' as a noun when you likely meant 'amateur dramatics'. The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for trends and ensure you use the correct terminology for the activities mentioned in the graph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The line graphs illustrates' (subject-verb agreement) and 'amateur had the biggest decrease' (missing noun). Additionally, there are punctuation and capitalization issues, such as 'it stood at 25' starting with a lowercase letter. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent sentence structure will help improve your score in this area.
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