Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

A glance at the graph provided reveals the number of participants in various activity form 2000 to 2020 at social centre in Melbourne, Australia.

It is evident from the information provided that Film club was the most liked activity of Australians with starting from around 64 participants in 2000 to a mere increase to 65 members in 2020. Martial arts was the second most loved activity with 36 members in 2000 and retained the number of members in 2020 also. Whereas, table tennis saw a dramatical increase in 2010 from 20 to a astonishing value at 55. Conversely, the amateur dramatics saw a steady decline from 2005 after having a small increase by 2 to members less than 10 in 2020.

It is interesting to note that Film club was the most liked activities by Australian citizens, followed by table tennis which gained its popularity after 2010. Thus, this was the overall trend in Australia from 2000 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for the four activities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the Film club as having a 'mere increase' is accurate, but the report lacks a clear overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While the main features are selected, the comparison between the activities could be more developed. The statement that the Film club was the 'most liked' is repeated in the conclusion, which is redundant. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing individual data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is organized into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for a report. Cohesive devices such as 'Whereas', 'Conversely', and 'It is interesting to note that' are used to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is slightly repetitive, particularly in the final paragraph where the information about the Film club is restated. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved to ensure a more natural progression of information. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the final paragraph adds little new information to the summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at less common items such as 'dramatical increase' and 'astonishing value'. However, there are issues with collocation and word choice. For example, 'dramatical' is incorrect; 'dramatic' would be the correct adjective. 'Most liked activity' is a bit simplistic, and 'retained the number of members' is slightly awkward phrasing. While the range is sufficient to convey the meaning, the errors in word formation and collocation prevent a higher score. More precise vocabulary would enhance the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'activity form 2000 to 2020' (should be 'from'), 'at social centre' (missing article), and 'most liked activities' (should be singular). Additionally, 'a astonishing value' should be 'an astonishing value'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall accuracy. The control of punctuation is generally good, but the sentence structure could be more varied to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical competence.

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